Ten years have passed and Equestria has seen many changes - some good, but most bad. Now Daring Do must work with the resistance to save the world from the greatest evil ever seen.
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Must have missed it. I'm guessing.... Scootaloo is the spy?
You know strictly going by the synopsis I'm a little surprised that this story is only one chapter long. Please respond to this comment.
Nice little story, the only problem with it being that it's little. Seriously, this could be much bigger, after all, what did Twilight and the Mane 6 do? Why isn't Starlight either working with them or been dealt with? What happens if she changes things? Enquiring minds want to know.
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Yeah, I know it is short. I wanted to write a lot more, but 2 hours goes by fast.
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You could expand this rather nicely. You've given us wonderful hints of intrigue, chess moves, operational security, and a fair bit of unsolved mystery.
But you don't need to expand.
What you've given us fulfills the purpose of the prompt, and resolves the conflict set up at the start. I approve. I want more, yes, but it doesn't NEED more.
This was really good, a pretty neat twist. I'd like to see a lot more, this AU has so much more to go! However, as it is right now, I still enjoyed it a lot. Thank you for the read, and I hope you will probably take this in a larger direction sometime
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Indeed, and I saw your note about it. That said, there's nothing stopping you from going back and expanding on it, something I'd love to see. I particularly like that you didn't go with the typical evil Mane Six or evil Twilight but instead made them misguided.
A nice little story with a good flow and intriguing lore behind it
As others have said, this could be made into a lengthly epic adventure, but what you have here is more than sufficient, leaving the rest to the audience's imagination. That's definitely a good, often neglected option.
I wonder, do you use en dashes instead of em dashes on purpose? Just a small bit that has caught my eye.
Reminds me of that episode in Justice league meeting the Justice Lords. Too bad it just ends like that.
And the better question. Whose the spy?