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Hmm... not bad.
Not bad actually for being your first story and I'm interested where this story leads to.
Well...that wasn't all that bad.
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Thank you! The second chapter is already in the making, I wanna hit a like goal before I post it though.
Liking the Fic so far! But when Gallus talks to him self, it just Seems a little strange? A bit too descriptive to be talking out loud to himself.
It would prolly be better off as his thoughts rather then him speaking out loud. Cause personally when I talk to myself, it's not full sentences, half of it is thoughs, but that would be even stranger and difficult to type out coherently.
Replace I with my. Other than that I like where this story is going.
That was a good chapter. Please continue!
Oh shit new chapter!
I'm really enjoying this! I'm looking forward to more.
oof poor gallus
Aw yeah! More schoolroom smuttiness from my favorite pair! This was really fun! Glad you were inspired to do more quickly!
As for suggestions: I'd like to see more consistent perspective -- it bounces back and forth between the two pretty quickly, to the point where I'm not sure at the beginning of the sentence if we're in the griffon's head or in the pony's thoughts.
That said, overall a good, sexy read. I loved the bit with the drawing, and I'm a sucker for under-desk fun! Hope you keep this going!
Blowing him in his sleep >>>>>>>>>>¦
Dead story?