Little Twilie uses legal work so she doesn't have to make a friend. Celestia is not amused.
Sequel: Chrysalis has a legal battle
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This would have read a lot better if "Equestria" was properly spelled.
10/10 would read twilight taking over equestria again
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Fixed it.
sequel idea suggestion: Twilight uses ancient changeling bylaws to declare herself as the hive Queen. Chrysalis' subjects end up having to honor their new Queen and her declarations and forcibly eject their extremely exasperated ex-queen from Queen Sparkle's Hive ®.
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Nope:
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Double Nope:
Definitely in the top three most adorable coups I have read.
I could totally see this happening
Does "emergency building materials law" declare that the property of the state which said individual constructed his residence on now belongs to that individual? I'm pretty sure it doesn't. Which invalidates the following logic.
Also, Twilight's place of residence is the book fort, not a whole castle.
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Why is fixing my spelling so hard? I checked three times. Also the hole point is that none of these laws make much sense when you think about them.
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*snrk*
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DAMNIT
This is hecka good!
Fear the legal loopholes and discrepancies!
I added an author's note, loosely inspired by
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Damn, I've been inspired by writing said author note, and will never be able to sleep again without writing a sequel, so one is coming.
great story and I can see that being cannon as well for some reason,
as for the note I can see twilight have foresight to fix those issue with that or still hold the copyright to the country name
Oh my Celestia....
I damn near passed out from laughing so hard at this.
The sad thing is, is that I could see an episode like this being made (if this upcoming season wasn’t the last one
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Like and a favorite from me.
This would be fun and likeable for me if Celestia was going along with it in her usual calm and playful "I really want a break so sure let's do that" (pleasantly surprised at her clever student and proud of her) demeanor instead of getting legitimately angry. As well as being being woefully ignorant of her own laws. (How has Equestria flourished under this Celestia's rule, again?)
Instead it comes across as a somewhat emotionless and antagonistic Twilight, almost farcical insertion of Cadence (yowza) and Shining Armor, and that Celestia's entire present staff seems to be treasonous - in that she was actually flipped over this and everyone just kept it going/ignored her. Said ridiculous flipping also kind of makes this a character assassination piece rather than the lighthearted comedy of adorable Twilight/Celestia interactions I feel like it was meant to be.
No ending where they all sit down and close up legal loopholes, showing that they were just displaying that there were a few dangerous laws and provisions which didn't have an expiry before now, making a fun and friendly round-table of paperwork to show they were just helping out their mentor/aunt/supreme liegelord and commander? Without something like that it just seems pointlessly antagonistic rather than funny and cute.
Not that it matters, people enjoyed it, and an opinion is just an opinion. But those are my thoughts for you.
Holy... Twilie, you're far too clever for your own good.
Wat just happened?
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I enjoyed the fact that Princess Celestia was powerless to stop a filly from taking over her own castle, and all because of her own laws. That being said... it's probably because she was a filly that Celestia didn't stop her. Who'd ever seriously consider arresting a filly?
*finale flashes back to mind*
Oh, um, uh...
Who'd ever consider arresting a filly like Twilight?
Also, the A/N:
And this didn't get featured because...?
=.=
Loved it!
-_- What did I just read? It's hilarious... but it's completely random!
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No the sequel is random:
Chrysalis has a legal battle
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True... True...
Both deserve mustaches:
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I agree, the characters made me cringe, but the story is silly.
If it makes you feel any better: It was you who teached her.
Good story!
I enjoyed reading it!
Suggestion: Instead of Equestriatm better use Equestria™ (this "TM" is it's own symbol).