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This premise seems backwards. Like, wouldn't she be the educator in the scenario, like with flying?

9579083
This isn't incest, so da fuq you doing here, boi?

The premise does come off as backward, but it's still within the realm of possibility, so that's not going to ruin immersion for me at least

9579090
I'm waiting for the bonus chapter where Ember shows up for the big reveal that she is the mother to both Spike and Smolder.
After Smolder finds out she's already pregnant with Spike's egg(s) of course.

I thoroughly enjoyed the story, and caught a couple typos:

  • “Not like they have many other dragons to do to, right?” -> to do it? Or I might just not be familiar with this turn of phrase.
  • None can know this ever happened.” -> no one
  • At once, something enters -> entered
  • it wasn't groans echoed -> groans that echoed
  • And for Smolder, -> given the second half of the sentence, should just be "And Smolder"
  • “Now, as for between you legs...” -> your
  • Mares had their tails to cover their primates -> privates
  • He did everything aside from droll at the sight. -> drool
  • which we were cutely tucked underneath -> Not actually sure what this is supposed to be, but the sudden first person is weird.
  • “It's a very inmate act." -> intimate
  • "can our flaws me assuage" -> be assuaged? Also could be "fears be assuaged", since assuage specifically refers to feelings.
  • as strong as the one in his heard -> heart
  • He then looked at the top of her slit, seeing, at its top, her slit poking down -> second slit should be clit
  • Her thighs quivers -> quivered
  • splashing right into his purple snot. -> snout
  • The initial taste was better -> bitter
  • exhales at the same time. -> exhaled
  • reaming carefully in place -> remaining
  • the scratching of his heart -> not sure
  • and then pull himself out again -> pulled

The story, the action, and the dialog were all solid. Definitely faving this.

One question though: given that the whole lesson started with: "this is how mating makes eggs", it seems a little concerned that neither of them are concerned about actually making an egg.

The potential for sequels is high here.

9579094
Then it turns out incest is banned in the dragon lands so they're forced to live out the rest of their days in egg-xile.

9579472
Lol.

Oh hey. I know yousa.

I don't read a lot of sexual fics, but this one cought my attention and it was really worth it!

I can't wait for a sequel where smolder cones to spike with eggs saying he's the father in front of everyone

9579279
Thank you for all the saves! The edits have been made.

9579480
I tend to show up randomly.

9579790
That's a good character trait to have.

9579795
I mean, it's in my name, right? My writing efforts have been way, way lower than I'd have liked for quite a while now, and nearly all of those efforts have gone into a big project that's not ready for release or school projects.

So I'm left to occasionally shitposting just to prove I'm not dead.

9579827
I know that feel. I'm trying to become prolific just to prove my existence in a superficial, superfluous, and ephemeral way.

So I'm right there next to ya.

9579840
Good on you. You've got me beaten in the words published department by about 4 times, so I'd say you're on the right track.

9579861
Ho boah.

Quality over quantity, my friend.

Be well.
~Yr. Pal, B

was good. But because Hasbro spike's guilt still remains the same size only gained wings (only to sell still as baby dragon), should have the same height of Smolder or slightly higher, will take that he has second molt, why the justification of it wins wings was ridiculous.

Sorry for crying out loud.

And so begins Spike's Harem, at least I hope to see that in a possible squeal.

9579861
At least you published something. I cannot get past the stage of "Everything i think seems awesome, everything i write seems like a shitty idea. FML". Legit every idea i have plays like a movie in my head. Putting it to words is like trying to climb mount everest with 3X gravity.

shouldn't this be the other way around?

*Looks at cover art*

I'm surprised that passed through moderation at all.

Get the feeling that dragon couple will be doing it more often.

please continue this with the other girls.

9580982
nothing showing, its only mildly suggestive...think that passes...

9580982
What is wrong with your profile picture

There is something extremely wrong with this

9579795
Your profile picture is gay as hell

Great story! Love the educated Spike. Good job making it hot, fun and educational!

The only thing that throw me was the loss of his wings. You mentioned this was written before, but you probably just missed the edit/update for that. Thought I should say something.:twilightsheepish:

9.5/10:moustache:

Comment posted by Kevin Harvick deleted Apr 22nd, 2019

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Listen, I can get why you would hate this...but don’t extend that hate to the people who actually enjoy the story, it makes you seem like a douche. You may not be one, but that’s what it looks like to others. And if ya being sarcastic then my bad.

9580395
Jajajajaja I know that feeling bro...
Thought I am better at drawing

How to drain your dragon's cum.

9583232
I like you, your clever.

:twilightsheepish: Wow! Spikes lessons are doing really well, All his students are passing with flying colors!
:duck: We even threw in extra credit
:moustache: Our next classes are herd building
:twilightoops: Wowzer!

One typo major caught my eye, but otherwise a good story!

“Because intimacy is supposed to make you weak,” he replied once more, feeling his cock stiffeningstiffing as his talon caught with her slickness. “It's the surefire way to know you've found someone you can trust. That they can make you weak, and instead of abusing that, care for you instead. Anyone like that is worth raising eggs with.”

I think you mean to say "stiffening".

Best sex ed theme story ever! I demand a sequel!

Man this was cute.

“The heck is a sex anyway?”

That is all.

Asking what sex is, when the real question is 'what does Pot of Greed do'? lol.

Most excellent.

“Who? The hall itself?” Smolder lifted a claw only to flick the smaller dragon on the forehead. “Only dweebs come to school on the weekend. It's just you and I, pal.”

I remember WAY back when, the POGO comic strip (anthropomorphic animals)
All the characters are going on a trip except Pogo & Mamzelle Hepzibah (who had a crush on Pogo)
One of the other characters tells Pogo "You & Hepzibah will inhibit the swamp alone"
Pogo is all :applejackconfused: "ORG!"
Then he says "Oh, you mean 'inhabit' the swamp alone"
Character "No, I mean 'inhibit' "
(While looking in a book labeled "dictionary")
Pogo goes "ORG!" again, then says "On second thought, I can come with you"

“Alright. So you really just asked that. Okay.” Pangs of desire came from his cock. Spike was finding it hard not to grip his cock and jerk one out. Even worse, the need to be held was worse when he had a female staring directly at his tool. “Besides bathroom stuff, a dragon's cock is supposed to expel cum in (into) a female's womb. This gives life to her eggs. Then dragons are born!”

Probably use the correct word "semen" & perhaps add "also called 'cum' "

“Sorry, sorry.” Spike shook his head while getting the last of his chuckles out. “Just weird to have the one-up over you on something.” His eyes were set on her slit, her folds slick with the juices of her love. “And I've someone describe a pussy like that. It caught me by surprise.”

probably say "vagina"

& Congratulations to Smolder -you're going to be a Mommy! :yay:

and his heart beast faster.

beats beating

“Crazy to think that Spike could write all this... so well and realistic... it makes me think... how could he write all of this without experiencing the real thing?”

Fimfiction :trollestia:

Great story :rainbowkiss:

TEN. THOUSAND. WORDS...

9579960
Not bad, they should really make more Spike x Smolder stories though.

9579960
So like is Spike the same age as Smolder in this story?

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