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Lonely Fanboy48


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There’s only one more night until Pistachio goes with Rarity to Manehattan to be her guest during Fashion Week. He’s starting to get hype to hang out with one of the famous ponies in Equestria but at the same time he never went to Manehattan. That wasn’t until he heard someone outside and unexpected meeting the Gift Givers of the Grove.

Thanks to Daniyel099 for editing this.
https://www.fimfiction.net/user/292246/Daniyel099

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 16 )

Uh. Yeah. Christmas ended quite a while ago my man...

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Don’t mention it, people post Christmas stories outside of December and this wasn’t supposed to be about Hearths Warming.

This story's actually really good.I hope you'll post more stories soon!:pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by IDontWatchMLP deleted Jan 19th, 2019

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Yeah... Great story though.

Comment posted by Strawberry Surprise deleted Mar 7th, 2019

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I’m trying to get a better editor, quit with the forced criticism already.

Comment posted by Strawberry Surprise deleted Mar 7th, 2019

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I know and I’m finding them but can you town down the criticism? It’s not making me feel any better.

Comment posted by Strawberry Surprise deleted Mar 7th, 2019

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I don’t usually write stories like I used to anymore but at the same time I want to have fun writing them since they will never happen in the show. But I’ll try to make the quality better.

I like the concept, but aside from the obvious flaws, the reindeers don't quite feel in character. I want to like this, but I'm sorry. It's just pretty bad. :fluttershyouch:

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I tried to keep them in character but it’s too difficult.

A simple read but you shouldn't have Pistachio repeat the lesson he just learnt from the deers. It kinda feels repetitive that way.

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He was talking to his parents so they will understand.

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