Ponyville is quiet today. Disturbingly quiet. So are all of Fluttershy's friends. But Fluttershy is completely comfortable with it. She loves days like this...
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I was expecting psychological horror.
Beautiful.
LOL ok this was both awesome & hilarious!
This is delightfully heartwarming. Fluttershy is lucky to have friends who believe her when she says what she wants.
I expected something horrible by the end. This is a nice surprise though
I was expecting a Feghoot. I would have been fine with that, but a sweet little slice of life was nice too.
Expected something terrifying revealing at the end.
It was not I was expected.
That's a good thing.
What a lovely little read this was.
Nice quiet surprise.
*Gasp* It's pretend Fluttershy is Zecora day!
See, at the end everything was explained, but I had long suspected the truth. It was the "thriller" tag that threw me off and made me wonder if everypony in town was kidnapped and the mane six were replaced by changelings. Seriously, I feel like that's only there to confuse us.
Clearly, Pinkie Pie is eschewing sugar to try and minimize her bouncy-energy here.
As difficult as Angel Bunny can be at times, I'm pretty sure he's actually quite honest. In "The Ticket Master" Fluttershy said that she was just helping Twilight out with no ulterior motives, then Angel Bunny gave her a look and Fluttershy admitted to Twi that she really just wanted the Gala ticket. So, who's teaching who honesty there?
That was a pleasantly cute read hehe
I think the psychological horror here is just what we inflict on ourselves for expecting something horrible when there are no horror tags!
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It's marked with the "Thriller" tag, which is appropriate if you've ever watched some of the better episodes of the original Twilight Zone and similar series: stories that leave you uncertain about what exactly is going on, let your imagination run wild with theories as to what it could be... and then yank the rug out from under you when they show you what it really was...
I read the author's notes, and have one thing to say.
THANK YOU!!
Pointless noise isn't stimulation, it's a form of air pollution. And I'm sure we can all agree the most noxious form of that pollution is that one person who never shuts up. Quiet is a good thing, people.
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[Picks self up off floor, shivering nervously.] Um... thanks ever so much for your kind support!
Seriously, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Okay, but that was... surprisingly gentle? And cathartic???
Soooo, is everypony in town on board with this? Because that one pony didn't seem too keen on it. Dude got dragged away like a victim in a horror movie.
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Sorry if I startled you. As I'm sure you could tell, I have several people I am forced to be around who never learned that silence is golden.
Sometimes.
I do want to add that I have no problem with conversation. What annoys me is when people talk across crowded rooms, or just spit out their thoughts with no consideration given to whether people actually want or need to hear it. I think anyone would have the right to be annoyed by that, though.
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There's always one pony who doesn't get the memo... and Pinkie gets bent out of shape if you merely blow a Pinkie Promise...
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Well as long as everyone's in agreement about the quiet day idea. Personally I think it's overkill to grind the economy of an entire town to a dead stop for the sake of a single ponys birthday, but as long as it isn't being strictly enforced and everyone's doing it of their own free will then alright.
Otherwise that's an unfortunate bit of tyranny on the part of the Mane Cast.
If Fluttershy ever needs a day of quiet, all she needs to do is to go this world's version of South Korea on it's CSAT examination day.
I have never been so anxious in my life.
Y'know, it's actually remarkably rare to find a story on this site that is just straight-up uncut 100% pleasant. Like...there's no conflict here as such; there's a hint of a mystery since we don't know exactly what's going on until the very end but, outside of the one pony getting yanked aside before they can spoil anything, it's all focused so squarely on how happy Fluttershy is to have this nice quiet day all to herself. And there's no Nasty Twist as one might expect given the "Thriller" tag (and also just the history of Pony 'fic on this site XD; ); it's just a Really Nice Thing Fluttershy's friends all decide to do for her once a year and that's that. And I actually kind of love that? The story isn't especially long so it isn't as if it forces this simple, friendly little premise beyond its breaking point. Instead we just sort of get to soak in the nice, warm feeling you do such a nice job conveying of contentment. You have an appreciably gentle touch for the prose here, one that focuses on all the small details (and makes excellent use of Angel and the particular nature of his relationship with Fluttershy to punctuate each beat just right) while allowing each one to add on to that same overriding sensation of contentment, calmness, and pleasantness. It's just such a nice story, one that makes you feel nice for all the characters involved: Fluttershy because she gets to have this nice special day all her own, and all her friends because they're so happy to do something so nice for her. And you even wrap it up with a punchline that feels entirely in keeping with all of that even as it's deliberately framed as a major breaking point in the proceedings. Thank you very much for this sweet little story! ^_^
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You're more than welcome! And thanks so much for reading and providing such in-depth feedback, it really helps, hearing what readers think!
I do like straight-up, warmly pleasant stories myself. (As you can see from much of my other published work here.) My favorites are ensemble stories, ala Ticket Master, that get the entire crew involved, though I realize that can make it difficult to give individual characters the attention they deserve. Lately, I've been working on stories that focus more on individual characters or pairs of characters in more detail, and this does seem to be more popular with folks here. (Or maybe I'm just improving with practice...)
I'm particularly pleased this story proved to be such a hit. I set out to write a story about Fluttershy being thrown a surprise birthday party by Pinkie, and I realized that "surprise" is kind of the opposite of who she is, so Pinkie would throw her pretty much the opposite of a surprise party: a celebration where everyone is just kindly and pleasantly silent, all day. And I realized that, presented properly, this could be the My Little Pony equivalent of a Twilight Zone episode, complete with a somewhat unorthodox and pleasant surprise ending... hence the Thriller tag. I'm really happy that readers in general got this and enjoyed it -- it says good things about the readership here!
Thanks again for your kind feedback, it's much appreciated!
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Ooh the "Twilight Zone" comparison's a good one I hadn't thought of before but which makes perfect sense in context (especially since some of my own favorite "Twilight Zone" episodes are among its more light-hearted like "Mr. Bevis" X3)!
Not exactly sure what it says about me that, while reading, my mind flashed to such TZ episodes as "It's a Good Life" and "A Little Peace and Quiet" (the latter from the 80s version).
Stories like this remind me that it is impossible to ever truly run out of original ideas.
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Ding Ding Ding! You just said today's secret episode title!
"It's a Good Life" in particular, or more precisely the Jerome Bixby short story on which that episode is based, is my primary role model for the tension-in-the-everyday tone I was aiming for here. Hence the often-repeated refrain in this story, "it was a quiet day...", which is a subtle homage to Bixby's classic.
Though Fluttershy, bless her heart, isn't anything like the little terror that Anthony Fremont was...
Unbelievable.
That whole time I was on the edge of uncertainty and caution, and then the ending hit.
I promptly reread it and my god. Knowing vs unknowing is like night and day.
That takes skill.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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In the sketch in the TZ movie, the little terror actually took the mouth off her sister. That did occur to me.
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Good thing Trixie was out of town, then, eh?
I'm so glad I checked the tags and verified that "sad" wasn't one of them, because my mind immediately jumped to "she's dying and everybody is giving her a perfect day before she dies". I think I've been reading too many sad fics and it's messing with me. Glad it was just her birthday.
Silence is golden, as was the story.
Excellent execution. A very well paced story.
That got unsettling, especially after the one poor stallion's abduction and Fluttershy just shrugging it off. I've never been more on edge while reading a pleasant little slice of life. And don't get me wrong, this was pleasant in the end. It just went through some uncomfortably eerie territory to get there.
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Thanks much! And just for the record, the pony unexpectedly walking around the corner wasn't harmed in any way. That was simply a necessary beat in this kind of story: it's the point where the audience has likely settled on the "everyone else has gone away theory", so bam, here's evidence that they havent... and that something even weirder is going on. It was a kind of twisted fun, actually, playing the "thriller" aspect of the story to the hilt, knowing full well how nice it actually turns out.
And I'm also glad so many readers were willing to go along with the suspense, yet liked the unexpected ending. Thanks, everypony!
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I think Pinkie set her up with show in some other town. Trixie have many qualities* but 'silent' is not one of them.
*That is not my opinion, mind you. It is hers.
If only my coworkers would do this, I could finish a year's worth of work in a day!
And here I was expecting a creepypasta of some sort
Adorable and thoughtful of Fluttershy's friends
More of a borer than a thriller.
I'm definitely being antisocial when I agree with you here.
Getting to see Fluttershy spend a day with her animal friends with them being highlighted more as proper companions instead of Fluttershy being a crazy cat mare turned up to eleven with how she talks to them was nice. Oddly enough, I've seen enough stories where her relationships with her animals are less like a cutesy cottage commune gang and way more like the cat thing.
As I started reading this, 'Lullaby for Mergo' started playing in my head.
A day like that would be nice.
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Same!
That was the most tense non-creepy thing I have ever read. I fully expected her to run into something awful at every turn. Specially when you has her friends walk out of the Forest!
You did well.
The one thing that threw me off was the strangle... thing...
Other than that, I was pleasantly surprised with this.
I thought maybe Fluttershy had done something to make everypony afraid and scare them into cooperating.
Okay I got to admit it I got something with wrong because the town was a little bit too quiet for my taste because you know how Fluttershy likes those kind of things when it's not too crazy or something like that but then towards the end it was her birthday yesterday so they wanted to do something very quiet because she doesn't like surprise and loud music and everything so that was nice and Pinkie Pie try to restrain herself not to go crazy this was pretty nice keep up the good work
Sometimes your story synopses make it seem like the worst horror twist is gonna happen and I get scared to read