The Power Bimbos take on the seductively sinister Love Bunny
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Great chapter. So happy to see a new one for sure. It was fun to see Spike interact with the Wonders for sure and the difference between his interactions and Twilights interactions were. I so can't wait to see how thing play out with Rarity. Honestly I am still SUPER into Sparity for this, and I think they would be amazing in this together. I do think that after today Spike AND Twilight will step up his training. Spike needs to be stronger than before. If he is going to compare and be of some real help to everything. I don't want him to be just a sidekick or a supporting character. He has done great in being a co star to Twilight and I don't want to see him lose that when the girls become more star players.
Great to see this return. I hope we see how Love Bunny herself gets stuff done at some point soon.
Spike needs to arouse his ancestry from his dragon blood.
Vlad got stuck on the railroad tracks, and Humdrum tried to save him, but he was just too... clumsy. Oh well.
Okay, so everything is pretty much great, though I feel you skipped out on a little action in the orchard, however, there is one glaring problem. In the fight scene you continuously changed the names of the two villains! Alizarin and Ginger would randomly become Lemon Zest and Sugarcoat, than swap back, than swap back again. At first I thought I was mistake and two more had joined the fight, but upon rereading o double check, you just name swapped them continuously. It's a pretty glaring issue that really draws away from a fast paced action scene. I heavily suggest fixing it immediately, because the action itself is good. Overall, a solid chapter, and Dash has tasted defeat twice in 5 hours, rough day for her. I look forward to more, and I too hope for more humdrum... best part of the chapter was the "God damn it!" that interrupted the villain-hero banter so comedicly wonderfully.
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They were originally Lemon Zest and Sugarcoat. However midway through I decided to change them. Thanks for pointing out the name mistakes. I tried to catch them all, but I guessed I missed a few I might wanna find an editor.
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It happens, so no worries. Your usually pretty well edited on your own it seems, so that's rather impressive in the end.
Rarity dating Blueblood? Ewwwwwww
Looking forward to next chapter.
Glad to read a new chapter; it was a good read. Keep working at your writing, my dude, and this'll be hotter than it already is. Hope Rarity breaks up with jerkass soon, and it was entertaining to read the fight scene. Keep at it, dude! I understand how work can be. I await the next chapter.