This is a 2-in-1 featuring Twilight and Sunset. The first six chapters are about Twilight's life while the remaining feature Sunset. The pair of interludes provide secondary information about events in the story.
Characters include:
Twilight Sparkle
Princess Luna
Sunset Shimmer
Mane-Six
Humane Seven (NO Sci-Twi)
Vinyl Scratch (both Equestria Girls & original)
Bat ponies (Thestrals)
Star Swirl the Bearded
There are references to the Batman Vampire comics and the Cirque du Freak book series by Darren Shan.
Credit goes to Vector-Brony
Chapters (17)
I must say I thought enjoyed this story
Congratulations on a story well done
Do I have any complaints..... yes but as a author myself I know that it was a tough decision to follow the path that you did so congratulations
I still want more though
9255410
Thank you very much. I may leave this alone for now and add something more in the future. Right now; I spent three months writing this and don't really have any idea on what to do next.
9255556
Don't worry you did a wonderful Jon my friend, a good story always leaves the reader wanting more.
9256363
Thank you very much
Fuck you Asmodeus, fuck your fake steam messages.
While the general premise of the story is interesting and there are no or very few errors, the whole story - at least as far as I read it - feels off.
Its far to fast paced and gives almost no description of the scenes. That and how everyone acts makes everything feel cold - there is no emotion. One moment Luna is a cold killer then she spares Twilight light a switch is turned in her head - without elaborating what goes on in her head. No crying for the death of Twilight's family, not even by herself. Also Twilight's behavior does seem too mature for 5 years old.
I'd have loved a story about Twilight as a vampire, there are only few out there that are completed and many rub the wrong way. But with this fast a pace, no context, almost no descriptions and no emotions, this story is not for me. I live for the emotions. Otherwise it would have been well written. I'll refrain from giving a negative or positive vote.
Okay, I don't exactly understand how her friends simply ignoring her warrants blood being spilled. They agreed that they would give her space, but they never mentioned they would go spoiling the secret to every single individual. Twilight also could've, I dunno, talked to them to find out why they've been avoiding her instead of doing absolutely nothing, according to the text.
I think Luna and Twilight were being more paranoid than cautious, and the act to silence them was pretty unnecessary. This kinda dampens my experience of this story.
This just got spooky-
*you gained a like*
All heck has broken loose
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Thank you for the compliment
10670122
Clearly you need to play Pony Island.
10670121
The movie was a little inspiration for the story.
what a great story with vampony Luna and soon to be twilight, very interesting
9306280
I would hope it gets better as it goes on.
Am I the only one thinking, "How did Luna see herself in the mirror" or "Why isn't she burning in the sunlight", even if she wasn't in an uncontrollable rage, like when she killed Twilight's family, she still should've had those aspects of vampires.
Tell me I'm wrong
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I never had intended to use specific traits from vampire stories in here. There's inspiration from many stories altogether
I likey indeedy roo!
whelp, this went to 10%
I see that why this is alt universe, cause sunset took twilight's crown in the 1st movie and so on
The nobility have overinflated Ego's there's only a scant few who don't have their heads up their asses
Especially house Blueblood or should I say house asshole is more like it
An eye for an eye and a life for a life
Looks like Luna got revenge for her parents that were murdered
That's karmic justice
Celestia's parents murder Luna's parents later Luna kills Celestia's parents then Celestia herself