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Shy_Guy_Animat0r


Hello! I am an aspiring fanfiction author and have begun to start writing MLP fanfics. I am a fairly new writer so any CONSTRUCTIVE criticism is helpful!

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After the intense battle with Paradox, Judai Yuki decides to travel the world once more. However, as he travels back to his dimension, a strange energy saps him away into the land where Duel monsters
and large mystical creatures are wreaking havoc amongst the scared citizens. Unable to resist Judai must help them if he ever intends to find his way back to his world. Though Judai's deck is ready for anything it'll take more than just wits and talent...Judai; will have to attend school...AGAIN!? Oh well; yall know the routine. Grab your duel disks and get your game on; cause its time to D-D-D-D-D-D-D...DUEL!

(Based off after Yugioh 3D: Bonds Beyond Time)
[Also; name title is a WIP; any suggestions I will be gladly open to]

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 34 )

Titles seems fine for now. I'll keep an eye out for this story

Not a bad start. The only thing that bugs me, more than it should to be honest, is Jaden being called by his Japanese name. I don't blame you for this, I'm just used to hearing his other name instead. Also, maybe have him ask for information about where he is in a calmer manner. I get that he's in another world, but that kind of behavior would only draw attention to him.

And followed, I'm really curious to see where this goes.

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So; would you like me to change his name to the English version or stay the Jap version.

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It's fine as it is, it just bugged me too much to leave it unmentioned.

Haha great job on the reference of the shows:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:
Get your game on; cause its time to D-D-D-D-D-D-D...DUEL!

This is good. I like it. Keep going.

I'm interested to see where this will go. Although this is just a me thing, since I only watched the dub, every time I see Judai I see Jaden.

This is good. I loved GX. It was a good anime.

I saw you said that GX is the best one.....I agree.

I hope we get to some dueling very soon.

This has been quite interesting... Let's see ahere this goes...

P.S. What deck do you often use?

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I BRANCH FROM DIFFERENT USES, BUT IM MORE OF A GEN 1 - GEN 2 KIND OF GUY, YUGI MOTO STYLE DECK

So for Judia's deck will we just see the E Heroes/neo spaicians that are in the show or are there going to be heroes like shadow mist and solid soldier?

Nice story. Please continue it

The description of that figure Judai is about to duel reminds me of Trueman there in a way.

Please continue this story.:fluttercry:

More please, this fic has MEGA potentail.

When is the next chapter coming out?:rainbowhuh:

I also want to say I am pretty interested in the story here.
Though I wonder if it will be continued though.

Disappointed that Spike is really missing out on all of this with whats going on in the next chapter here..

Glad this story is continuing.
Bummed that Spike missed out on this, why wasn't he with them anyway?

About the Duel itself, I suggest you tell us on how much ATK and DEF a monster has when summoned and tell us if said ATK/DEF is changed. Same with their Life Points. Since its hard to keep track of what ATK/DEF or how much LP a player has left if its not being exactly told.
Like type it like this:
"Elemental HERO Neos ATK: 2500/DEF:2000"
"ATK: 2500 + 500 = 3000"
Judai LP: 4000
LP: 4000 - 1000 = 3000"
That way its much easier for the reader to keep track of stuff. Not everyone can memorize what ATK/DEF a card has without looking it up and such either.

Also, wouldn't Judai's LP reach 0 if the Shadow Rider used 3 copies of Tremendous Fire? Since his LP went down to 3000 by Exploder Dragon's direct attack(showing its the anime version of the card where it can inflict battle damage to the opponent unlike its TCG/OCG version)

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When Exploder Dragon attacks a monster and is destroyed, neither player takes damage only when it attacks directly. Also, I am correcting any mistakes in the story. Thank you for the input.

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That is in the TCG/OCG there(neither players takes any Battle Damage from attacks involving it if it was attacking, that includes Direct Attacks)
In the anime, its only the controller doesn't take battle damage from battles involving it(regardless if it was the one attacking or not).
So yeah, I suggest using the TCG/OCG version maybe so Judai's LP won't reach 0 like that.

Looking forward on what happens next, hoping something about Spike there.

" It's my monsters effect. You see young Judai, whenever Exploder Dragon is destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard, the monster that attacked it or it attacks gets destroyed with him. Also, neither of us take battle damage, so I'm still in the clear ," The Shadow Rider explained.

but he have to take effect damage for flame wingman, is effect is made effect damage same of attack poits of the monster he destroy

" Oh!oh! I know that card! If Judai has no face-up monsters on the field he can discard two Neo's monster; 1 from his hand and 1 from his deck and draw two cards! " Pinkie alleged. Sunset and the rest of her friends looked at her with a confused look.

but convert contact is have to discard one "neo-spacian" bith is hand and deck, and neos no count a neo-spacian, just to you know

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Aside from my other reply..
I wonder where was Spike? It sucks he missing out on seeing all of this and being left out..

As a proud fan of Yu-Gi-Oh GX I really enjoyed this story. Keep it up and GET YOUR GAME ON!!

Dude I’m loving this crossover fanfic I hope it continues.

Once again i find a good story and once again no second person why is it so hard to find good yugioh stories with a second person

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