This is, aside from grammatical errors, genuinely good writing. It's not often you get a good author willing to write clop, but I welcome it. I'm also inspired to read your other story, consider yourself watched!
I'll keep track of this, not sure if I like it or not though, I try to read at least a few chapter before judging a story. There are a few grammatical errors, mostly involving tense, that you should pay more attention too. Other than that, this story looks like it can be good.
"Soarin releases his load into my mouth.It is so much and so thick that I have to chew it a little before swallowing it." "I have to chew it a little before swallowing it." "chew it a little before swallowing it."
.................................... what the.................. is that even............ no, you know what? i dont even wanna know. that aside, good job so far. I'm tracking this shit.
1008066 IMHO, TAW is my favorite clop writer; she (yep, female) writes very well, and writes all sorts of clop too so pretty much whatever you like is there somewhere. OH and this fic was pretty good too. Kinda had a brain fart at the dream, completely forgetting that this was a clopfic. good threesome scene, although the "royal horn" thing threw the erotica out the window and shot it with a cannon (a creepy one, no less!) *all of the above are opinions*
Well that certainly was an interesting start to a story. This thing hasn't been getting all that much attention recently. I must admit, I LOVED that short little threesome between Spitfire, Dash, and Soarin. DashFire is my favorite pairing, and having Soarin there was a nice addition.
A really sound start so far, I think. Little errors, which I like. I would also bet that Twilight Sparkle is the "mysterious pony".
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I really need to stop reading clopfics. Still wondering as to who it was.
This is, aside from grammatical errors, genuinely good writing. It's not often you get a good author willing to write clop, but I welcome it. I'm also inspired to read your other story, consider yourself watched!
I agree it has to be Twi- or Flutters!?
I'll keep track of this, not sure if I like it or not though, I try to read at least a few chapter before judging a story. There are a few grammatical errors, mostly involving tense, that you should pay more attention too. Other than that, this story looks like it can be good.
I made a bet with one of my friends this would happen.... damn, I was right.
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About the dream thing or the sex?
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I meant that someone would right a 50 shades of Grey spinoff on FiMFiction. Even more specifically with Rainbow Dash.
"Soarin releases his load into my mouth.It is so much and so thick that I have to chew it a little before swallowing it."
"I have to chew it a little before swallowing it."
"chew it a little before swallowing it."
.................................... what the.................. is that even............
no, you know what? i dont even wanna know.
that aside, good job so far. I'm tracking this shit.
I say it's either fluttershy, Twilight, or (for some reason I thought of this immediatly) Rarity
1008066 IMHO, TAW is my favorite clop writer; she (yep, female) writes very well, and writes all sorts of clop too so pretty much whatever you like is there somewhere.
OH and this fic was pretty good too. Kinda had a brain fart at the dream, completely forgetting that this was a clopfic. good threesome scene, although the "royal horn" thing threw the erotica out the window and shot it with a cannon (a creepy one, no less!)
*all of the above are opinions*
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Well, it was a dream! And, as far as i know, dreams can get more deranged as they go on .
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I SEE WHAT YOU DID THERE
Well that certainly was an interesting start to a story. This thing hasn't been getting all that much attention recently. I must admit, I LOVED that short little threesome between Spitfire, Dash, and Soarin. DashFire is my favorite pairing, and having Soarin there was a nice addition.