Nightmare Moon has been defeated, the long-lost Princess Luna has returned, and everyone is happy. Well, Princess Celestia is. The castle staff is still rather unnerved by everything the sudden disappearance of their monarch, and are still wary of this situation.
One guard is particularly unhappy with this new arrival. Which is why he's staying as close to her as possible.
This was an interesting take on how Luna's appearance changed in the series, as well as filling in an obvious query:
If even Spike had a misunderstanding about who Luna was post-elements (and post-Pinkie celebration), presumably the royal guards would be even more unseated by the whole affair.
I'd honestly like to see a continuation on this, with more actual interaction between Luna and the castle staff. But as-is this is still a well-done vignette.
Very interesting take, I have to say. Really got me into Sterling's Mindset. Even if I knew Luna wasn't Nightmare Moon anymore, for just a few moments I was feeling Sterling's anxiety and believing like him Luna hadn't truly returned.
Stoic.
This was lovely, but there were lots of missing words and other weirdness. Maybe an editing run or a prereader would be a good idea? It's so lovely otherwise that it shouldn't have to suffer from something so straightforward to fix.
beautifully written ,beautifully told. well done to you on this fine story.
I was kinda expecting a post transformation:
"OH NO, SHE'S HOT!"
Very Nice can't wait for the next chapter.
Very nice. I like the thought process you gave the guards.
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The front part of a night guards armor, like this: vignette.wikia.nocookie.net/batponies/images/9/9f/Luna%27s_guards_S2E04.png/revision/latest?cb=20131025032208
So, minor bit to pick here. If the Princesses are supposed to have a guard assigned to them at all times, where the guard for Princess Celestia through all of this?
Eh, minor point that doesn't change anything for the story, but that just stuck with me.
Otherwise, I liked it.
Typo:
capital
The Capitol is a building.
almost everything
"most" nothing/everything/any/etc. sounds silly
Their
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Thanks for the heads-up! Fixed those typos
Bide
Shalt thou
Dang this was good.
thinking OR
to think
Just a small typo here... other than that, great story! Loved the way you portrayed Sterling's thoughts 👍
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This is the kind of comment I came down here to see. Thank you!
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I aim to please.
Only in Equestria
Technically that should be 'somepony', as well, but I suppose that's the writer's choice. I couldn't find another useage of either form of the word in a quick skim of the story, so I'm not sure if it's intentional or merely an oversight.
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We don't know it WAS a pony who did that.... it could have been a disguised changeling or even a traveling griffin! Using "someone" is appropriate here. LOL
I know the cover picture is supposed to be the night guard armor (as seen from the front) but I swear the author has tried to hide Nightmare Moon's... uhh... anatomy... in that picture.
Great story, but that you-know-what is all I can see.
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I did consider that, but since the speaker in this case is a pony guard, it would make sense for them to default to 'somepony', rather than 'someone'. It's not a big deal really
Beautifully written. Well done.
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I'm glad I could help. Though that "most" everything still remains. ;)
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I second this, actually.
I'd like to see more of these interactions.
~Skeeter The Lurker
This is a very good story. Definitely deserves a spot in the Favorites box. There are still a few typos, though...
Typos aside, a very well-written vignette.
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It would have been nice if the show had spent part of Season 1 on this sort of thing. Instead, Luna just vanished and wasn't seen at all until Season 2.
Both sisters should have interacted with Discord at his return, and the Gala would have been even more interesting with an awkward Luna. Then it would have had more than enough material for a 2-parter.
Ah well, few saw the potential of the show for proper fantasy storytelling.
Ah, this brings me back to the early days of the fandom, when everyone latched on pale-coated Luna and made a few hundred different bonding fics about her return.
Granted, that led into the New Lunar Republic and Solar Empire fiascos, but hey, the fanart was good.
Only nitpick would be the bat pony fanon (it's always been a costume) but the things people have done with them over the years has been enjoyable nonetheless.
Nicely done.
I would like more of this! This story has a softness I have long missed in stories.
I love how you show us how she changed physically after that whole event. Pretty sweet! A very nice read; you did excellent!
Great story!