Huh. Seems promising. I'll read it.

Ooh nice finally some more Spitfire fics. (looks at spoiler tag) Sigh... and i was so looking forward to this.

I love this story to death!

There should be more male and futa/hermaphrodite romance stories.

*Me going in blind* Man, this looks like it's gonna be something else!

*after story*

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It definitely was. Here's a thumbs up, yo.

There's one thing I don't understand is why every other futa story is always futa on male (if there's a male in it) and they make the male super submissive. At least the two in the story feels more natural. so thumbs up from me.

Don't understand the appeal of futa on male and the guy is only on the receiving end only, doesn't that just make it a gay thing?

Adorable

> Futa Spitfire
*looks at skin-tight outfit in the cover art*
"A secret well kept indeed."

909349 That's a strong agree from me. A dick in your butt is GAY no matter what.

I was interested til I saw the Futa tag. Sorry, not my thing. Maybe next time. Catch ya, later!

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Me too, mate. Me too...

I loved the story and I hope you decide to uplode the rest of it but wether you do or dont thankyou for the wounderful read.

I walked In blind. This wasn’t bad persay but I obviously had a wtf moment in ch3. I like the amount of sentiment in this story, overall high rating from me.

Reads like a RPG game where your choices have already been made. Skipped quickly through the first chapter tbh. Story depends on "you" being willing to participate as a puppet, so even with certain elements of interest to me I have to say neigh.

The entire author subplot feels incredibly unnecessary and way too overblown. It also doesn't serve the story in any meaningful way, which is odd considering how much time and attention it was being given with the involvement of the princesses, who also didn't really add anything to this story.

And despite whatever reservations Spitfire might have had about her 'secret' driving a wedge in her relationship with the human and her relief at being accepted, turning her into a shy, blushing, stuttering, and embarrassed mare who needs to be 'rescued' from a suitor doesn't really do justice to her character. Makes her feel more like an exaggerated Fluttershy than a kickass Wonderbolt captain.

> Getting railed by a horse lady with a massive horse dong
"Not really my thing, but it's not like I'm gonna thumbs down the story based solely on-
> Sad Derpy
"WTF! Downvoted and reported!!!1 Mods ban this sick filth!"

Loved it! Good work!

Overall, I thought this story was okay.

You mentioned that this was part of a series you had going. After reading this, I'd actually like to see the rest of it now.

Normally a story of this length shouldn’t have subplots. Normally subplots shouldn’t be left unsolved. Due to this being the first part of a larger story that is yet to be finished, I can overlook that and be happy with it. I’d like to see the rest and know what actually happens with everything.
I enjoyed both the story and the ‘plot’, but feel it could use some proofreading to really make it shine. Again, due to this being the first part of a story you’ve struggled to make progress on, I understand pushing out what you have to get it out the way. Now it’s here, do take the time to comb it for spelling errors and typos, and maybe get an editor to give it a once over too.
Overall I enjoy this story and wish for it to fill its potential in a similar way to how Spitfire fills her wonderbolt uniform.

Subplot twist: Depry once was delivering Annsons packages, she accidentally tripped and destroyed it. Already loving Anon, she read through the draftings and realized Anon was the legendary author. She now keeps secret for him. One day this fact comes out (perhaps Anon finds a copy depry had made of an unreleased writing that derpy made whilst watching disty) After a tearful confrontation, Anon realizes that he to is in love with derpy

I must say I am really not a fan of Futa, but I love the way you used it here!

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Why is futa better than R63 ?