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Citrus Recluse


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Great work keep it up

Well, the work is...um...different. Though for ME personally, I am a bit confused...you turned a PONY...into a Serpent pony (Lamia)...so you could take PONIES...and make them HUMAN(ized)...so you can "take off their pants (not exactly the most appealing description)" Thats a bit of a stretch for ME to suspend disbelief....

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I think you may misunderstood the intent. The idea is that these are anthro versions of the ponies, like Sonic the Hedgehog characters; rather than the four-legged ponies on the show, these are the same characters, but presented as two-legged creatures with a general human body shape but still retaining pony features like hooves, ears, unicorn horns, snouts, etc.

I kind of hope that during one of these segments, Celestia or Luna turns the tables on the snake ponies.

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Can't say for sure off the top of my head, but I don't think Celestia or Luna are planned to be in this installment.

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I see.
Well, maybe in another installment (if there is one after this)

Great work keep it up

It always feels weird to me whenever I read a hypno fic where Starlight ends up as one of the victims of the hypnosis, even when, like in this case, it serves the overall story.

please i need a update, this story is amazing.

nice chapter, keep up the good work.

You have Trixie working on herself where I believe she was supposed to be working on Starlight, or was that supposed to be the other way around?

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Could you point out which paragraph(s)?

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I don't know how to pull excerpts. It's while they are still in the bathroom though, I do recall that.

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Trixie stuck her tongue as she focused on stroking Trixie with the end of her tail. She tried to work out how Trixie had done that with her tail and couldn't quite manage it. All she could do was wiggle her tail around, but that seemed to satisfy Trixie, as she laid her back and moaned.

He meant this paragraph and I think it's the second and thrid mention of Trixie that should be Starlight.

This is such a cute storyline. I give it a :pinkiehappy::yay::raritystarry: out of 10.

Great work can’t wait for the next chapter

8 out of 10 fap-worthy.

Comment posted by Midnight_Hellfire deleted Jun 29th, 2019

so, we're nearing the end of any of your MLP work?

There are quite a lot of errors in this chapter. Some of the obvious ones are that at several points Fleur is spelled as Fluer and Minuette as Minutee. I would be interested in reading the actual finale.

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Yes.


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Fixed the names, but you're out of luck on that finale until if and when the commissioner finds someone else.

Nice story, do you know if there will be a sequell?

"You," Starlight said, "are going to go find another waiter to come wait on me and my girlfriend. Or waitress. I don't care. Then, after you pass your table onto them, you're going to get a camera, and take a photo of yourself doing something embarrassing, which you will then present to your boss in the hopes of getting fired. And if he doesn't fire you right away, then resign yourself. Do you understand?"

noo, bro doesn't deserve that



and i was kinda hoping for a male transformation finally

been denied the male transformation yet again

so who commissioned these? i want to find out if they had any more installments made

I don’t like this, I read a little bit of it and it’s awfully gross.

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