I want to qualify this story as a crackfic type of story, but it takes itself too serious to be called one.
Case in point: Normally my suspension of disbelief would not allow me to just let Princess Twilight completely trouncing the Rainbooms in a fist fight without comment, but the absurd brutality of it allowed me to give it a free pass as if it was a crackfic situation. Then you manage to explain how she did it in a way that sort of makes sense for the story.
9045974 Tahanks I did have to explain in some way. Obviously aginst pony AJ Rainbow and Pinkie she would be trounced but against humans whose powers don't enhance their physical abilities she has an advantage
I did not enjoy this story at all. It's way too fast, and the way Twilight reacted, i think you only wrote that for Drama's sake. It's beyond stupid, and...UUGGHHH.
then changing Apple Bloom and all this other stuff selling her body for sex. It's a badly written fanfic, throwing out stuff like that.
What else, Oh Sunset mentions she was a assassin, or a alien that took the form of a pony and then a eathlen? I mean what the hell does Sunset selling her body has to do with this story or forgiving anyone.....
it's too fast, too sudden, too little detail to stupid.
I want to qualify this story as a crackfic type of story, but it takes itself too serious to be called one.
Case in point: Normally my suspension of disbelief would not allow me to just let Princess Twilight completely trouncing the Rainbooms in a fist fight without comment, but the absurd brutality of it allowed me to give it a free pass as if it was a crackfic situation. Then you manage to explain how she did it in a way that sort of makes sense for the story.
9045974
Tahanks I did have to explain in some way. Obviously aginst pony AJ Rainbow and Pinkie she would be trounced but against humans whose powers don't enhance their physical abilities she has an advantage
9046024
You mean "unstable"
I did not enjoy this story at all. It's way too fast, and the way Twilight reacted, i think you only wrote that for Drama's sake.
It's beyond stupid, and...UUGGHHH.
then changing Apple Bloom and all this other stuff selling her body for sex. It's a badly written fanfic, throwing out stuff like that.
What else, Oh Sunset mentions she was a assassin, or a alien that took the form of a pony and then a eathlen? I mean what the hell does Sunset selling her body has to do with this story or forgiving anyone.....
it's too fast, too sudden, too little detail to stupid.
Thumbs down.
9046051
I must admit it is a bit rushed but I will explain the demon part in an interlude
9046066
Don't care i'm done.
the first one was ok but this is a mess, nothing but a bad mess.
9046135
Fine not everyone has to like it. I write because I enjoy writing and if people like it well that's good if they don't well it's not my issue.
When sunset was questioning the cmc I pictured her sitting in a fancy leather chair, feet kicked up on a desk with this face
The story does feel a bit rushed but, I enjoy reading it.
9046187
Thanks and yes it is a bit rushed but I will explain the demon thing in the following Interlude.
9046202
LOVE’IN IT!!!!!!! Please update soon!!!!!!
Holy hell mama Gazelle