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allibug919


I'm Allison, and I love MLP :) I am working on an OC, but my favorite ponies are Applejack, Dash, and Scootaloo.

Comments ( 39 )

Lol, this was like morally good porn. O.e

Not bad. My only suggestion would be to quit switching between pat and present tense. It's really very distracting.

very good more please:pinkiehappy:

they did it in rainbows? aren't they spicy? off, that would have hurt for a human :rainbowlaugh:
wel, it seems that equestrian ponies are made differently than humans
congratz on writing a good, yet morally acceptable erotica. :yay: yep, not a clopfic. this one is more mind than body! i like that :twilightblush:

a yellow star, a green thumb and 6 spikes on the way: :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

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About Past and Present tense Damn good clop fic

This is like the quintessance of every porno ever. Awkward sounding dialogue, sex for the sake of sex, bad camra angles, it was all there. Those things don't matter, though.

Because porn.

I'm going to read this simply because this is a "Rainbow Dash is straight" story. TwiDash, PinkieDash, and AppleDash is all well and good, but man cannot live on one thing alone.

Finally some consensual, simple, straight sex involving my second- and third-favourite pagasi. (Fluttershy best pony!)

It's just a shame the writing is terrible. Pick a tense please.

1000822

This whole site needs more straight stories. Am I right or am I wrong :trixieshiftright:

Seriously... pick a tense, and stick with it. The other guy may not have cared, but it can severely interfere with reading.

Since this is a clop-fic, and you are sticking more to the present tense, I suggest you go with that, because it tends to work better for this sort of story.


EDIT:

Actually, looking at it, you seem to be sticking more to past tense. I still recommend present tense for the aforementioned reason.

Seriously, I will re-read it when the tense situation has been fixed.

1000975
I agree, Fluttershy is best pegasus
I, myself, am a Pinkie fan, but whatever.
I tried to edit the tenses, and I am still working on it: I developed this from a roleplaying session, so I'm trying to fix the tenses because the guy I was RPing with wasn't exactly the best at grammar :unsuresweetie: I had to change his parts a lot, the grammar and usage of verbs and adjectives were just repulsing. I'm still editing, though, and trying to catch mistakes! But thank you for reading!
1000398 I'm sorry for any awkwardness, once again I was trying to combine two different writing styles.
999948 I actually didn't intend on the scene happening in "water", but it happened. You can't exactly control someone else's mind :applejackunsure: For my part, I tried to address the spiciness: the other person just didn't seem to understand where I was going. Especially in the part where I said, "'Well, how do you want to try one? Drinking the water isn't exactly safe,' she said, winking."
You can see where I was trying to go, but he didn't get that :twilightsheepish: I really tried to be as straight-forward as I could!
999294 I am fixing that, thank you!

That was...nice. :moustache:

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I enjoyed this very much great work mate. I wanna see a bit more though, are you a regular clopfic writer?:rainbowhuh::unsuresweetie:

:rainbowwild: Mm, yes. Quite.

hmm...something about celestia....luna.....and a long stick.......go on:rainbowlaugh:

Really cute story :raritywink:

I love a good SoarinDash clop!

Bonus points for true love & stuff.

Awesome work .. awe they are in love :heart::coolphoto:

A story where Rainbow Dash isn't portrayed as lesbian just for being a tomboy? This pleases me! :pinkiehappy:

"he held her close and rested his chin on her collarbone."
Little known fact about horses that most, if not all bronies should know, horses in fact do not have collar bones.:twilightsmile:

I'd kill for a sequel. :rainbowkiss:

I saw. I came. Then I exploded.

1002296 No, I'm not :applejackunsure: This is the first time!
1026285 Sowwy :fluttershysad:
1060051 But I don't know where I'd start :raritydespair:
1083919 Dats Hawt :derpytongue2:

1213694 Now you know, and knowing is half the battle! :pinkiehappy:

1213694

Ooh! I have an idea!

Morning after!

What about that? ^_^

This was...passionate :rainbowwild:

I love straight dash stories. This is one of the best stories i have ever read. I dont mind the past and present switching... i do it all the time. I just need one thing from you... more

:heart::pinkiehappy: i love love love it!! :)

you could of made it last longer...

Comment posted by Yamazaki deleted May 9th, 2016

This deserves a sequel.

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