Writing for fun. Mainly focusing on Sunset Shimmer and Equastria Girls related content
The warmth of the summer finally fills the air and every filly and colt in the city of Canterlot is looking forward for the Summer Sun celebration, especially a little pony, called Sunset. Little does she know that very occasion would be the beginning of a new life for her.
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*filly
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hi starlight~ xdd
*filly
same feeling when i am waiting for my pizza delivery lol
this made me hungry, in midnight, out of ammo in regrigerator
changing the lightening into flash, would that be better?
you forget Wallflower, again~ xdd (jk)
8998922
i think that's on purpose, since the title is "PHILomena"
8998922
besides, the "filly" in other place is spelt correctly
"were" both sitting at the table
9000270
Regardless, it's wrong. And one of many other spelling and grammatical mistakes.
9000619
"many other spelling and grammatical mistakes", agree.
"philly" is wrong, i doubt it. coz i know that should be "filly" but not "philly", tho, but i still think, there might be more meanings beyond it. i cannot say for sure, coz i havent finished reading the whole fic yet, so i say i doubt, coz i cannot sure. i'll leave this question afterewards
9000619
in the other places, it spelt as "filly", and the "philly" in the brief introduction is the only mistake i've ever known, not the others, just "filly" to "philly", this is the only example. besides, a english speaker is hard to spell "filly" as "philly", unless tis on purpose. for example, maybe i misspelt "filly" as "gilly", coz "f" and "g" are neighbours in the keyboard and one can easily misspelt like this, or simply miss some characters, like "illy". but imagine, in what kind of occasion you spell the "filly" as "philly", if you know filly the word, aslo you know english well? i think thats obvious.
so as her voice. xdd
why past perfect? wouldn't simple past tense do?
and "paid" instead of "payed"
ok, i've finally finished the reading. lovely story, but i feel strange when celestia said "i am the rules", sounds like not a word from a royal princess.
and i think starlight is right about the mistakes, there are some. but hey, that means you can do better, and knowing that is a good thing, i think.
anyway thanx for the efforts.
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"I am the rules" sounds like something our royal majesty her highness Snarklestia would say though.
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huh? dont get it
Nice story there.... just two things : one, you have made grammatic & spelling mistakes & two, you keep on moving from first person to third person & vice versa. Just clear these two things & this story will be Philomena! (Loved XD) xxxx