• Published 8th Jun 2018
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Marks for Effort: Twilight's Reprimanding - DakariKingMykan



Twilight gets a good talking to for her serious lack of judgment

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Twilight's Reprimanding

Twilight Sparkle was very angry with the Cutie Mark Crusaders, and asked to see them in her office at the School of Friendship.

“I can’t believe you’d do something like this!” she scolded, “You tutored Cozy Glow, and you’ve been setting her up to fail?!”

The Crusaders were most confused. “What are you talkin’ about?” asked Applebloom, and Twilight angrily showed them Cozy Glow’s failed exam. Surely enough it was filled with horribly incorrect answers.

“What are the six Elements of Harmony?

“Five turtlenecks and a cheese grater…?”

“Who is the princess of Friendship?

“Your mom…?!”

Now the crusaders were so confused, their heads ached. “I don’t understand.” said Sweetie Belle “We didn’t teach her those answers.” But it was in vain for them to try to explain. Twilight was either so mad that she couldn’t think straight, or felt the issue was clear enough.

“I can’t believe you three would do such a thing. I know it upset you that would key you come to the school, but teaching Cozy Glow all the wrong answers so she’d fail her test out of spite?!”

“But we didn’t…” cried Scootaloo “We taught her--”

“I DON’T WANT TO HEAR IT!!” snapped Twilight, and she opened the doors motioned for the girls to leave “I’m going to have to ask you to stay away from my school and my students.

Now, please leave!”

Broken-hearted and with tears in their eyes, the girls walked sadly out of the office, and out the school doors, which Twilight slammed shut.

Cozy Glow saw them walking sadly away, and she felt really guilty about something, “Oh, no! What have I done?”


When Twilight took a Lunchbreak that day, she normally sat with her friends in the teacher’s lounge. “Hi every pony.” she said politely to the others, but the girls gave her a sour look, and scooted away from her.

Twilight was confused, and scooted in closer, only for the girls to scoot away from her again. “Is something wrong?” Twilight asked “Why are you all avoiding me?”

“I heard what you did, Twilight.” Rarity said “I was standing around the corner on my way to my sewing class when I heard how you spoke to Sweetie Belle and her friends.”

Twilight sighed softly, “Look, I know I sounded a little harsh, but I can’t have them messing with our students.”

“That’s exactly what we mean!” snapped Rainbow “Do you HONESTLY think the girls would do such a thing? I mean, sure… they’ve done some really crazy stunts, especially in the last few days, but I don’t think they’d ever try to sabotage Cozy Glow just to get back at you!”

Twilight was starting to lose patience, and showed them all Cozy’s test, “Then how do you explain all this?”

Applejack checked the answers, and she giggled “Your mom?!” she held in her laughter, and resumed her disappointment “Look, Applebloom would never do such a thing. I know this because I saw what they were doin’. Big Mac told me everything the way they helped Cozy help him with his chores so he could be on time for his date with Sugar Belle.”

“I saw them too…” said Pinkie Pie “Mrs. Cake was thrilled with the present the girls helped Cozy make.” She held up a cupcake from her lunch that Mrs. Cake baked for her, with Rainbow Sprinkles.

Twilight was still unconvinced! “That may be nice, but that’s no excuse that Cozy filled in all the wrong answers! The girls were obviously setting her up to get back at me for not letting them attend The School of Friendship.”

Despite the compelling evidence, the girls still refused to believe the Crusaders would do such a thing. “Let’s go eat outside, girls.” suggested Rainbow.

“We’re right behind you Rainbow Dash.” agreed Rarity and the other girls all left, even Fluttershy turned angrily away from Twilight and walked away with her back turned.

“Not you, too, Fluttershy?” cried Twilight.

“Sorry, Twilight… but even I have standards. I think you need to do some serious thinking.”

Twilight was alone, and she was feeling a mix of sadness and anger.


For the remainder of the day, none of her friends would talk to her. Not even when they passed by her and she gave them a friendly “Hello…” they would just hold their heads up high and ignore her…

Pinkie even went to stronger but silly methods; wearing a blindfold over her eyes, and a clothespin over her nostils. “What are you doing?” Twilight asked.

“I can’t SEE or SMELL you either.” replied Pinkie. Of course, since she couldn’t where she was going, she walked right into a tall flower vase in the hall. “I’m good.” she called.

Twilight was starting to feel her friends were being unjust with her, but she spent her time alone in her office grading other tests and sighing softly.

Spike came in with a stack of tests and reports. He just put them on her desk and didn’t say anything to her.

“Oh, come on, Spike… not you too?”

“Eeyup.” Spike said and turned away from her.

Twilight had taken enough of this cold-shoulder. “Spike, I’m the head mare of this school, and it’s my job to make sure that all our students are well educated without any problems. I had to ban the crusaders from the school, and nothing you say or do will make me change my mind.”

Spike still didn’t even look at her. Just rearranged books on the shelf and said, “Then you’re going to get the cold shoulder for longer!”

Twilight was furious, but before she could say anything, Spike turned and glared at her, “Don’t you get it, Twilight? We’re not angry that you were doing your job, we’re mad at you because you misjudged the crusaders!

You didn’t even give them a chance to explain themselves. You just yelled at them, and banned them from the school with a cold heart.”

Twilight wanted to argue, but she suddenly reflected back to her scolding the girls and not letting them explain. “I guess I did get a little carried away. I was just so angry.”


“That… is no excuse, Twilight Sparkle.” growled a familiar voice. Twilight’s blood turned cold as she looked over at the doors to her office, “Princess Celestia…”

She didn’t look a bit pleased. “Your friends wrote to me about the situation, and imagine my surprise, not to mention disappointment in you.”

Twilight stuttered and stammered trying to find words to defend her, but the feeling of guilt and shame were creeping up on her. “I was just trying to look out for the school, and Cozy Glow’s future here.”

Celestia sighed, “Twilight, here at this school you teach friendship lessons, and you’ve forgotten one important thing any good friend does… and that’s to “Listen!”

Now Twilight felt awful, and couldn’t excuse herself anymore, for not even bothering to hear the crusaders out, and Celestia was right. She DID know the girls better than that.


Just then, there was a knock at the door and in came Starlight glimmer with a nerve-wrecked Cozy Glow. Both of them were surprised to see Celestia there, and they both bowed so suddenly.

“Sorry to interrupt…” said Starlight, “But Cozy has something she’d like to share with you, Twilight.”

“I’m certain Twilight would love to hear you out.” said Celestia.

Cozy twiddled her hooves, and finally confessed, “The Cutiemark Crusaders just wanted to go to this school so badly, and I thought that if it looked as if they didn’t know much about friendship you’d let them join the school…

…So I… failed my test… on purpose.”

Twilight was shocked… but more at herself than just at Cozy. “I can’t believe you would do such a thing!” she scolded.

“I know it was wrong…” cried Cozy “But the Crusaders helped me so much, and I really wanted to pay them back for helping me.”

Celestia looked down at Cozy, “Well, even I can’t condone purposely failing an exam like that, but your intentions were out of pure friendship, and I’m proud of you for that.”

Twilight slumped into her chair and her head lay flat on her desk, “I misjudged the girls…” she cried with tears coming to her eyes, “…Badly.”

She began to invision horrible things, like every pony in Ponyville finding out how badly she judged the girls, and she would be treated like a pariah…

He friends would never talk to her again…

All store owners and stand vendors would have huge signs banning Twilight from any services.

Worse than that, what if other parents found out about the scandal? Would they pull their students out of the school, leaving Twilight with no choice but to close down?

“NOOOOOOOOOO!!!!” Twilight screamed, snapping herself out of her nightmare, and realizing the others were all gawking at her with concerned expressions.

She blushed in embarrassment, and then decided, “I’ve got to try and make it up to the Crusaders.” Suddenly, a huge idea came into her head, “I’ve got it…!”

The others were all curious to know what she had in mind.


The next day, the Crusaders were pulled from school and brought to Twilight by Starlight.

“Are we in trouble again?” whimpered Applebloom.

“No, just the opposite.” said Starlight with a smirk.

Twilight approached the crusaders and bowed her head, “Girls, first of all… I want to apologize to you all. Cozy Glow told me something she’d like to tell you.”

Cozy confessed her misdeed to the girls about flunking her test, “I’m really sorry I got you in trouble, but I was just trying to help you.”

The girls didn’t know what to say, they were touched by her honesty and willing to help them, “But… that was kind of a silly move.” said Scootaloo.

“Yeah, even we wouldn’t do something as low as that.” agreed Sweetie Belle.

“Well… maybe not.” said Applebloom, and she and the other two remembered the crazy stunts they tried before.

“Ahem!” Twilight said “Honesty is one of the mighty pillars of friendship, but you girls already knew that.”

The crusaders blushed.

“So, in addition to my apology, I want to present you girls with these honorary diplomas from The School of Friendship, making you graduates here.”

The girls looked at their diplomas, and could believe their eyes. “We graduated from this school without even studying.” said Scootaloo.

The girls then danced and hopped all over singing, “WE GRADUATED! WE GRADUATED!”

They all then hugged Twilight showing that they forgave her and accepted her apology. Twilight hugged them all back, “And that’s not all…” she said “I’ve done a lot of thinking, and it seems to me we could use a few private friend tutors on staff at this school, and you girls are perfect for the job.”

The girls squealed with joy, showing their acceptance.

“Come on, girls… let’s go get turtoin’.” said Applebloom, and she and the others hopped off together, eager to get to work in their new jobs.

Twilight looked out the door and watched them all skip merrily along, and her friends stepped out from around the corner smiling at her for the noble act she had shown.

Spike and Starlight smiled at her as well, and Twilight never felt so at east, especially when she looked out the window and saw Princess Celestia smiling proudly at her before flying off in a glowing light.

Twilight sighed “Sometimes, I really love this job.”

Author's Note:

They all then hugged Twilight showing that they forgave her and accepted her apology. Twilight hugged them all back,

Ugh... GAG!!!

Comments ( 66 )

What can I say..? This was a cute short collection of vignettes, covered in awful grammar and enough typos to give any proofreader a hernia. There were a few moments where I couldn't even make out what you were trying to say. For example, the blindfold thing flew right past me. I do agree that Twilight was utterly OOC in the episode, but her friends would have probably tried to talk things through before just jumping to conclusions. Instead in your story they did the exact thing that Twilight did to the CMC: Not listen to her side of the story.
Final score: three meh's out of five. Would upvote if spelling wasn't physically painful to read.

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Well, I can fix that...

*Blocks you*

And while I'm at it, I'll fix YOU and your own serious lack of judgment.

the blindfold thing flew right past me.

How can anyone not see that Pinkie was so pissed with Twilight she didn't even want to look at her?

Not listen to her side of the story.

If you bothered to actually READ, THEY DID KNOW the story. Rarity heard what Twilight did to the crusaders, (from around the corner She heard everything that was said) she and the others knew what the crusaders had done the past few days, and THEY all knew the crusaders would never try such a horrible thing as to make Cozy flunk.

Twilight got exactly what she deserved!

And FYI, there's nothing really wrong with the spelling, but I'm blocking you anyway for horrible attention span and lack of judgment

090196 #3 · Jun 8th, 2018 · · 18 ·

Finally! I’ve been waiting since last week for a fic about this.

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How did you feel about Twilight's lack of judgment?

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Pretty upset

In my MLP story, there's a nod to fans reactions behind this, as one of my villainous OCs captures Twilight, brings her to the school of friendship, yells straight at her face, saying: "You think you can run this piece of garbage? You believe you're the Princess of Friendship? Ha ha, Twilight Sparkle, you're nothing! You are nothing but a SELFISH, GRUMPY, JUDGEMENTAL, WORTHLESS piece of purple and pink trash that doesn't like anyone except YOURSELF!! If Celestia was still alive, she'd be so disappointed in you.. Hahahahahahahaha!!!" and demolishes the School of Friendship right in front of her.

I know, my nod to this is way more dark, but that's how I want it to be. XD

Still, this is a great story. :) Idk why Hasbro likes making Twilight go over the top ALL the time XD, but no matter how ill tempered she is, Twi will always be one of my favorite characters. 😄

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Well, an obvious theory by many, Twilight's more of a CONTROL FREAK than a Friend (Constantly getting in people's faces and forcing them to accept her views of friendship) It's not an unshared theory, but that's just me and others.

But I'm glad to see someone who thinks DARK (Maybe you'd like my FRIENDSHIP IS FAILURE series)

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She is a control freak sometimes, that's actually true, but most of the time, she's just struggling to know what real friendship actually is, and it makes her that much ill tempered, as evidenced in the Movie when she yells at Pinkie and says " I'd rather not have friends like you! ". She doesn't know how to control herself in situations like that and can't really comprehend true friendship yet. That's how I see it anyway. 😄

And I saw that, I might read some of it. ^^ My MLP story " My Little Pony: Friendship vs Evil " is a 10 part story, and I'm working on the first 5 parts right now, read what I have in each part so far if you want. 😄 I took the Harry Potter type route, which means my story gets darker and more horrible through each part. And I love it. 😊

“I DON’T WANT TO HEAR IT!!” snapped Twilight, and she opened the doors motioned for the girls to leave “I’m going to have to ask you to stay away from my school and my students.

Now, please leave!”

Broken-hearted and with tears in their eyes, the girls walked sadly out of the office, and out the school doors, which Twilight slammed shut.

Twily never yelled at them. She was not that harsh.

Pinkie even went to stronger but silly methods; wearing a blindfold over her eyes, and a clothespin over her nostils. “What are you doing?” Twilight asked.

“I can’t SEE or SMELL you either.” replied Pinkie.

But she can still hear her.

“We’re right behind you Rainbow Dash.” agreed Rarity and the other girls all left, even Fluttershy turned angrily away from Twilight and walked away with her back turned.

“Not you, too, Fluttershy?” cried Twilight.

“Sorry, Twilight… but even I have standards. I think you need to do some serious thinking.”

Et tu, Fluttershy?

“Oh, come on, Spike… not you too?”

“Eeyup.” Spike said and turned away from her.

Et tu, Spike?

“That… is no excuse, Twilight Sparkle.” growled a familiar voice. Twilight’s blood turned cold as she looked over at the doors to her office, “Princess Celestia…”

Et tu, Tia?

Twily made it up to the Crusaders by acknowledging her mistake and making them tutors. There is no need to hate on her.

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Twily never yelled at them. She was not that harsh.

It don't matter if she was or wasn't, her behavior is still inexcusable, besides I had to revise it JUST a little.

But she can still hear her.

Well yeah... I couldn't put earmuffs on her or she wouldn't hear what Twilight's saying. (Cartoon works)

"Is your hearing aid fixed?"

"No."

"Then how do you know what I'm saying?"

"I don't."

(It doesn't work well)

Et tu, Fluttershy?

Fluttershy's capable of giving someone a cold-shoulder. After all, she gets angry too.

Et tu, Spike?

We just covered that with Fluttershy

Et tu, Tia?

You sure love to repeat yourself

Twily made it up to the Crusaders by acknowledging her mistake and making them tutors. There is no need to hate on her.

She's Twilight Sparkle, I've hated her and all MLP for their ways since day one, I get a KICK out of bashing them and shaming them. In fact, for even THINKING of doing such a thing, I'd rather the friendship be irreparably broken, and no amount of apology will get her back on the good side (she's lost)

If you think This was bad... you should see my FRIENDSHIP IS FAILURE series

I really don't get all the hate Twilight has gotten for her actions in that episode. Cozy Glow failed the test, and told Twilight the Cutie Mark Crusaders had been helping her study. Since the CMC are (as Twilight herself pointed out) already good at friendship, and should have been able to teach her everything she'd need to know, Twilight reached the only logical conclusion for that outcome.

And technically, she did hear their side of the story. They told Twilight they taught Cozy the right answers, but the evidence against that statement led Twilight to not believe them.

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And technically, she did hear their side of the story. They told Twilight they taught Cozy the right answers, but the evidence against that statement led Twilight to not believe them.

That may be, but that's still no excuse to many. She still KNOWS the crusaders better than that, and DESPITE the evidence, she still had no right to behave the way she did. For even THINKING that the crusaders did it, is bad enough to make us want to yell at her, but banning them from the school (Guilty until proven innocent)

*Glares at Twilight*

Me to Twilight: "I ought to kick you clear into orbit for you reprehensible behavior today!"

Remember, there's a Difference between UNDERSTANDABLE and EXCUSABLE

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What other conclusion would she have reached? That the CMC were just bad teachers? That would have been the least likely explanation.

And she wouldn't have much reason to suspect Cozy Glow, due to that very convincing performance she gave after "failing" the test.

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I'll answer you by PM

Comment posted by MJP deleted Jun 10th, 2018

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I DON'T like MLP, so I bash them, or turn them into something I LIKE! and heeding the advice won't help me sleep at night

and also, my beef is with the SHOW ITSELF, not the makers, not RESPECTABLE fans. (They like MLP, that's fine)

And HERE'S your logic...!!!

https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/769267/if-im-an-anti-brony-why-am-i-on-this-site

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She still KNOWS the crusaders better than that

Does she? She had basically three episodes with them before this one: The Show Stoppers, Twilight Time, and Surf and/or Turf. Twilight Time in particular would have soured her opinion of them.

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The CMC have a mighty big rep, so it's heavily implied that everyone knows OF them, and their crazy stunts. Plus, all we're ever watching is just 22 minutes each ep, imagine what happens in the ENTIRE YEAR and beyond in the show itself

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Indeed.
The idea that somebody could fail a test on purpose is inconceivably for Twily.

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She's Twilight Sparkle, I've hated her and all MLP for their ways since day one, I get a KICK out of bashing them and shaming them.

I think you might need a hobby.

Comment posted by MJP deleted Jun 10th, 2018

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I think you might need a hobby.

this IS my hobby making fics and vids for the main sole purpose of bashing characters and steam blowing to control stress, as well as to finally get what I prefer out of these shows...

Comment posted by DakariKingMykan deleted Jun 10th, 2018

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Are you ok man... do you need a hug.

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Doubt that'll help... but thanks

Oh, gee. I wish I could criticize this story for how horrifically terrible it is, but then I'm going to get banned because the writer can't handle people saying negative things about the liquid shit they spewed into their keyboard over the course of 4 and a half seconds.

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Oh, you can criticize, but you can't be rude about it...

the writer can't handle people saying negative things about the liquid shit they spewed into their keyboard over the course of 4 and a half seconds.

Like that... and I don't take advice from rude people.

So... YEAH... you are banned

This. I have been waiting to see someone do something like this. You have no idea how much Twilight's behavior in that episode pissed me off. I even said she was a worse principal/headmaster/headmistress than Monokuma. And there are some people over on the wiki who tried to justify Twilight's inexcusable behavior... which scares me to be honest.

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Are you kidding...? You should see the bitching and complaining I got everywhere else. Here, on Youtube... Some people are way more screwed than Twilight is.

Just look at all the comments I got here... (More than half the reason I got loads of downvotes, and my comments get downvotes is cuz of ignoramus bigoted bullies on this site who take pride in knocking me down)

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Not sure how that relates to my comment about how inexcusable Twilight's behavior was, but I'll take your word on that.

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It relates that people bitch and protest to me for scorning Twilight too (I know how it feels to be chewed)

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Ah, that makes sense.

Thank you soo much for doing this!

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You're welcome.

Blast #35 · Aug 1st, 2018 · · 9 ·

SOmeone's in a cranky mood here. I mean, look at all these downvotes!

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Nah, it's just people bullying me, (down-vote, riff, mock, insult, lie... you name it)

I post a 1000 word prolouge, and it gets sixteen thumbs down instantly....

then I post another story... it had only ONE VIEW... yet four downvotes...

even when I say a simple THANK YOU or HELLO... downvote galore.

and look at the people who LIKED my stuff. they got downvoted too.

This was good, besides maybe a couple things that might've not really happened with her friends, like them completely avoiding Twilight, and a couple grammar mistakes.



Note that I usually don't like critiquing people's stories, because I tend to think that my critiquing is always a little harsh, even when it isn't. So if you did get offended, sorry.

This was great! I was so mad at Twilight in Marks For Effort, and it was awesome reading this.

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I almost have another idea how this could go,

Suppose Twilight found the truth, but the CMC refuse to forgive her and keep giving her a cold shoulder, and for good reason.

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Oh definitely, that was exactly what I wanted to happen.

I'm glad that Twilight realized her mistake, but if she knew the CMC would great tutors, why didn't she and the others tell them that? Maybe if they did, then the episode would not be so bad. Also, i like to think that if Spike told Twilight that her attitude mirrored that of Neighsay, that could make the girl realize her mess-up.

Somewhat OOC, in my opinion.

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Have yo seen the show these days... lots of the characters are deviating from their proper attitudes... and no it is NOT growth

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You wouldn't mind naming an example?

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SHE TALKS TO AN ANGEL... Angel never acts like a brat

Fluttershy isn't as cowardly as she used to be

Rarity is becoming less of a Diva and more open minded... WRONG MOVE (Pick a path and stick to it)

At least Pinkie is still acting as crazy and as hyper active as she should be

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S9 hasn't even started airing where I live. So please no spoilers.

The examples you cite are examples of character growth, not deviation.

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To me their being pathetic... not that they weren't already before..

Now I'm busy right now (In florida)

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I get the impression you're not too keen on the more recent seasons of the show...

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I'm not keen on the show PERIOD (since Day one)

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