A look into what Rarity does before creating her designs. This time with a sweet addition.
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Well done!
I like simple stories where not much happens, and this one fits the bill. An nice, relaxing story.
Pretty much how Applejack Rents a Bobcat got started, too.
If Precious Scales were here his fire breath would do nicely, Alas he's still asleep.....
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I smell coffee!
I smell doughnuts
I smell apples
I just smell
and I still sit and do nothing as usual
The story came out great, and glad I could help you. Love you :)
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Love you too, fork man.
...and to think I am on Day Three of giving-up-coffee.
I've been drinking Earl Grey tea instead.
Enjoyed the story !
Nicely done slice-of-life.
If I could be Quibble Pants for a minute… Rarity's kitchen seems to be equipped with anachronistic modern conveniences instead of the Edwardian-era appliances one would expect. It might have been more interesting if she had an ice box, honey jar with wooden honey dripper, copper-pot style coffee brewer, etc. Also, Rarity is the sort of perfectionist who I don't see accepting pre-ground coffee. She would have a grinder.
This was really interesting fanfic. I really like that this was about Rarity having coffee. Coffee is close to my heart. In one part you mentioned Rarity worrying about her weight but when she keeps adding sugar to her coffee seems interesting choice form her. While she has the problem with her weight. Really well written fanfic. I really liked this.
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Thanks for your comment, but I would like to point out that she only added half a spoonful of sugar. ^^
I'm really glad you enjoyed this story!
The comma after "coffee" should be a period.
Again, the comma should be a period.
There should be a comma after "luckily".
It should be "it", not "them"
After "was", you need either a colon or just get rid of the comma altogether.
I think you meant "no grain was left behind" in the first sentence. It's also a bit redundant to put "left behind" in both sentences.
There should be a period after "smile".
There should be a period after "blushed".
Redundant.
There should be a period after "throat".
There should not be a comma after "words".
There should be a period after "marvelous".
A gap of realization escaped from the donut?
After "hum" should be a period.
Nice so far! I've read three hundred words. "She lightly tapped the spoon against the filter to make sure every no grain was left behind." Take out the extra every. XD
I've read it all now. This is an awesome slice of life story! And it's funny how a simple idea turned into this. Don't forget to add more commas throughout the story and: "I have to design blueprints!” Her eyes shined with inspiration. Shone actually reads better, but this story is still awesome and sweet regardless.
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Thanks for the comments and the advice!
Also, nice pun.
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XD You're welcome and thanks!