When a huge and startling event unleashes something inside of Scootaloo that even she didn't know she had, an investigation is started by Princess Twilight, enlisting the help of the other princesses, the Equestria Girls, and another.......person.
Secrets and pasts wished to be forgotten are once again brought to the surface. Action follows along. And possibly romance.
*A year after the end of S7.
*One instance of death.
*Gets Dark In Later Chapters. You have been warned.
Interesting
Unique, unexpected, and very in-depth. You have my attention.
My god I love this please write more. I love the idea of Scootaloo becoming an alicorn and this is the first story I've read it in.
You are the dest at writing ceep up with the good work
Just started this and color me intrigued.
Even though Scoot’s mom warned Twilight about the danger, I don’t think Twi really understands what she’s getting into.
Why isn't there a death tag?
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Sadly, I ran out of space for tags. And since it's not a common theme in the story, I felt very little need for it to have a death tag. But as a precaution I did place it in the long description.
I like this charter
"small-explanation"
just leads to BIGGER QUESTIONS
If they disappeared 15 years ago, then how did they teach Starswirl?
And Bloodblood not being a moron is a nice change to this world building
So far I am 1/3 the way through the story and I really am liking it. I think you may have some time line issues that you may need to correct or explain.
Major spoilers, if you aren't the Author, or at least to chapter 5, don't read.
By official cannon, StarSwirl lived and disappeared hundreds and hundreds of years ago. Up until season 7. In the season 7 we learn its closer to 1000 ish years ago. It isn't impossible for her parents to have been Beardos teachers, but I don't see how living family members are possible. Shifting between worlds can include time slips, so Scootaloo ending up in the future is possible, as is her parents being thrust back in the human worlds past. But I can't see any close family members still being alive.
The Monk
So it sounds like Frozen Fire never encountered her stallion in the afterlife--which leads to a question: what happened to him?
Is it because he's still alive, but held captive?
Will the other two Crusaders play any role in this story?
I haven't actually decided yet. They may, or may not.
Chief Mst Sgt. Walter Harriman: "Alert! Incoming wormhole!"
Apparently, it's illegal to keep a secret for your friend.
Celestia needs to get her behind in gear basicly usr overwelming firepower.
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You got that right, they need to start firing off magical blasts at them, heck they should just have Scootaloo scan for Sunset's magical signature and teleport to just outside the fence of the place before they start bombing it with their magic to free her.
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And once they get her just send the earth into the sun and leave.
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And what about the Human versions of the Mane 6 along with the other Humans that are like the Equestrian characters, they shouldn't be burned alive, heck the Principal and Vice-Principal should be saved if they can be.
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We'll evac them then.
Yaaas Celestia!!!!! KICK EM IN THE FLANK
I guess... Ppl are stupid enough not to notice that some dude is still alive but held captive by some maniacs...
Nooooo Cliffhangers!!!!
I just realized this....
In the past, Scootaloo arrived in Equestria as a newborn foal... But when she goes back to the human world, she’s still 16.
Does the physical age change depending on how long you’ve been in that dimension? Because she stayed on earth for 16 years, and 6 years later she goes back, and is still physically 16. And in Equestria, she has been there for 6 years, and is physically 6. So if she stays on Earth, for let’s say... 5 years, her “age” being 16, and then goes back to Equestria, would she still be physically 6?
But then how did Twilight and the rest that went over stay the same age crossing over as they were in Equestria?
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To be honest, I don't know. I just like it this way. Oops.
The people who are trying to get magic...all they really want is:
Celestia: "Scootaloo, we need you to make a wormhole."
Prepare for detonation
Why Sunset.....
Chapter 7:
Chapter 12:
This chapter:
Next chapter:
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Hahahahahaha!!! 🤣🤣🤣🤣
I like it so far.
Why isn't there a dark tag?
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Because the story is not entirely dark. I did mention in the description that it does get dak in later chapters.
Wait--there's a Clone Pool on that side of the mirror??
Your synopsis is trying so hard to be vague that it neglects to actually capture my interest.
Thought you should know. Have a good day.
Then let them scoots is basicly a better doom slayer anyways
Personally I would vey much like to see the marines come face to face with discord
Ooh, WildMagicSorcerer!Scootaloo. This is gonna be fun!
Really, Mayweather? The whole point of your wanting Scootaloo, and the entire point of torturing Sunset Shimmer was to learn everything you could about ALL of this that 'you don't believe'! Should've been more careful what you wished for, because you're about to get it!
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I too found these inconsistencies confusing
So I mean, I barely pay attention to the tags, so I didn't see the Human tag at first. Instead, I saw that twist coming from a mile away with the mention of Scootaloo saying her and her parents ran from some big disaster, and that there were two Scootaloos in this world (well, I didn't know explicitly until the end of the chapter that she was human, though. It's always possible counterparts are coming from another world where they aren't human, but some other species, after all!)
As for this chapter...my goodness, what is with that pacing? In a single chapter, we go from Scootaloo getting into a training accident, going to the hospital and then running away, sneaking into a treehome and then being caught, teleporting away and then being captured again, teleporting away and running into another safe bunker before being found again? Like, that's enough plot development for several chapters, or a chapter that's three times this size. It's fine if you have an idea and want to write it, but it needs to be paced out better!
As for the idea itself, it's intriguing enough anyways. If Scoots was 16 years old before crossing worlds, it would at least give her an edge in planning stuff out. Just as long as the other CMC don't find out she's secretly like 20 years old now. I still don't get why she'd stop in at Sugarcube Corner for a treat while running away from Twilight and Dashie and Applejack, though
Well, AJ is very sort of technically correct in that this isn't this world's native Scootaloo, but she's wrong in everything else. I wonder if she'll eat her words. Or her hat
...all hail the newest member of the pantheon, SCOOTALOO!!
Take it
take it
Whichever is more destructive and catastrophic
Chances are, someone, somewhere, somehow will do something monumentally stupid sometime soon.
Might as well get it over with.
Take it