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Hmm, interesting concept. I'll be keeping an eye on this one.
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Thanks! I have a number of story ideas for this fic (some that may or may not be based on mostly-true events), though Stalled Out will be something of a reoccurring series in the anthology, with at least 3 parts in mind at present. Gay fiction is a little less common here in Fimfiction, but given the character of most bronies I've met, I'm somewhat surprised at at that! Then again, maybe it's just the circles I hang out in...
YESSSSSSSSSSSSS]
Lovely, just lovely, and of course with everyone's favorite trap/sissy/fucktoy/pet stallion, Shining Armour. Not sure what about Shiny makes him so readily crafted into the perfect submissive, but I'm not going to argue.
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I know, right? He's just so fun to turn around that way! Maybe its because of his lofty stature, his handsomeness, and the fact he's a married stallion so that he can instantly be twisted into something a bit more kinky with a few creative strides? That, or he almost married a giant bug, so that might have something to do with it.
Brilliantly executed. No boring parts and no moving too fast, actions and dialogue feel natural, and you use just enough descriptions to give a mental image but not get in the way of action. There are many M/M clopfics here, and even many with sissy/crossdressing theme, but such quality is a rarity. Only 33rd clopfic in my favorites, and I'm on this site for almost 6 years.
I'm looking forward for new chapters, especially ones with Shining in them.
By the way, you probably should not call these ponies feral in the description, I understand now that you meant non-anthro, but before reading I thought you meant non-sentient horses.
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You flatter me, but I am happy to hear such kind words! My proofreaders quite liked it too, so I am happy all the moving parts came together for yah. I suppose since I was a furry long before a brony, I'm used to calling these kinds of horses feral; but then again, how would non-sentient horses have bathrooms? I suppose "show-style" is a more accurate term them. I'm fairly far in the 2nd part of this little mini-series, but I have another chapter in the works that will come before that, featuring a certain enterprising stallion on vacation in Las Pegasus~
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Yeah, think you left a comment like this one on that story too. As I said there, it's a style thing-I like the sound-noises myself, and most of my proofreaders do too, but I can get why some people might not. It also likely doesn't help that most of my writing is lewd-oriented RP rather than writing fics, and that's generally how my main partner writes. Perhaps I'll see about writing my next story with that in mind, try to go without them if I can and see how that goes? As for An Equal Burden, I have a few short tales I wanna finish up first, to put out a few small fires for future compilation-tales (including 2 for this one) before I dig into that. Thus, it'll be later than I originally planned, but I'll have more stories published in total which; given my previous record of 2 stories in a single YEAR, is already big improvement!
One suggestion I might have in the meantime (since I download fics I like and save them so I can read them without internet and have them all in once place, in case the fics are removed by the authors), is to remove the sound-words from a text file of the story if you download it, if they're that distracting? I do things like that with certain fics I save, like deleting passages with fetishes or scenes I don't like. I don't find it disrespectful or anything. just gettin' to the parts you like!
This was a good read, I hope to see more of this in the near future.
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Thanks, glad you liked it! The follow-up to this is certainly in the works.
Thank you, there is such a dearth of decent M/M clop around here, and now we finally get an ANTHOLOGY from a writer who knows what they're doing. Looking forward to more. I enjoyed this read, but sometimes the stranger was really pushing it for me. Things like:
Really took it from me seeing him as just cocky to a real asshole, perhaps even dangerous. Would he have really done that or was that just him piling on the aggressive motif during the moment? If the guy is really that violent Shining should really think of having him dealt with (if he even has the nerve to find his balls and identify the guy at this point).
Yeah, I know. I'm missing the whole point of a clopfic.
Still, this is really promising. Can't wait for some dolled up Shining Armor.
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Glad you like what you see so far from this little collection! I understand that some of the dirty/degrading talk is a bit on the harsher side, since everypone's got a threshold on that kinda thing. Mine is pretty high, since degradation is one of my top kinks, so I took it as far as I thought made sense of the stranger as I view him. He is certainly a kind of dick, no pun intended, but I don't think he'd really beat Shining in this case.
The way I see the stranger is that he's the kind of macho, blatantly-homophobic guy who'd never admit to doing anything gay in public and brags about all the chicks he bangs, but secretly takes a real liking from gay sex as a top. To him, banging or getting a BJ from a stallion is a boon to his masculine ego (after all, he's such an impressive example of maleness that even faeries are going down on him willingly!) and he doesn't see what he's doing as gay. Thus, he props up that masculine image with threats and degrading remarks, to distance himself from the fact that he's doing it and make it seem like he's doing the sub a favor. He's somewhat based on someone I know IRL, if they were secretly into gay sex.
Great work, everyone is leaving such big comments, but I just wanted to say it's awesome! I love gay Shining stories as I can kinda relate. Also I totally thought this story was going to involve a cock cage from some reason, though thinking about it now I don't think that would work in a pony world.
Anyway keep it up I hope you feel inspired to do a lot more!!!!
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Thanks! Glad to hear from anypony who likes what I make, whether it's a small or big comment. I've got plenty of inspiration, but it's always a question of time for me; however, I think that by the end of this month of the beginning next, there's a good chance that we'll see an addition to this compilation. Gay Shining is a fun stallion to write for so many reasons, given how much of a stud he's presented to be in the show, but how much smaller and nerdier he's shown to be in comparison to the more jock-like stallions of the guard. It's like he's asking for it!
Wow! just found your story though while reading a fic by The vclaw in also liked section. I want more...if that isn't too much to ask? whenever you start writing or update this one.
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It's certainly near the top of the list! I've got Part 2 of this particular part of the compilation, and the second little story for this, nearing completion; though I wanted to take a few days after my finals finished to relax before I focused on them. In the coming weeks, they'll get some attention. Glad you like it so far!
I have to say, these were both pretty sexy. Nice work!
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Thanks! Glad to hear that I gave you a couple of fun reads. I've got the third nearly finished as well, so look out for that next month.
As someone who has a big thing for adultery, this series is really meeting my expectations! Shining AND Filthy are fabulous stallions to utilize in stories like these, and I'll eagerly await seeing what you do with that kinky Prince next~
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Glad you've enjoyed the entries so far! You and me both have similar tastes then, in regards to forbidden fruit. Adultery is a very fun theme to play with (heck, my first story featured it), and in gay fics, it comes naturally; after all, lots of married guys have fun on the side to satisfy those urges, just like Rich enjoys on his vacation. As fun as it is to write, I think I want to try and vary my themes a bit on why a stallion would want to keep their same-sex antics secretive; most of my ideas for this series consist of some measure of adultery so far, even if it's not the main theme. One with Sunburst comes to mind, on why he's not keen on heeding his mother's plans for him to marry a mare, but he doesn't want to disappoint her, so he keeps his sexuality a secret.
I always love adultery stories, I can't wait so see what happens next.
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Thanks, they can be a sinful sort of fun! Just as Shining's tale continues, maybe I'll pay Filthy's room another visit in the future, and see what he's got in mind for that unsuspecting, adorably-femmy housekeeper working his way down the hall?
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Would be great to revisit those two again, I wonder what it would be like for Flutershy's father committing adultery?
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Not sure, I'd have to think more about him as a character. Shining and Filthy came somewhat easy in how I imagined them in these scenarios translated on the page. I'd have to find an idea for Flutter's father than I'd like, and do some pondering on how to portray him. Still, ideas for this collection kinda pop into my head randomly or though experience both personal and third-hand.
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It's just an idea, I am not sure either how you could get Mister Shy to commit adultery with a stallion without being cohered into doing it, unless he is into secret kink that is so weird and obscure that you would be hard press to find someone with a similar kink. Then again there could be something about his could collection that he is very tight lip about it...
Well this was a good read, and was interesting to see it as a dream sequences, I was a little confused that he was anthro in the story, looking forward to see more of this.
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Oh, he was? Did I slip a hand instead of a hoof someplace and didn't catch it? I'll have to fix that if I can find it, he's still a pony in the dream.
Honestly Cadance will probably be OK with Shining's fetish. And help him along.
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Perhaps we shall see, if Shining isn't as covert with his little hobby as he might think he is. Besides, some risque mare-talk is always good fun, even if the mare in question is your husband!
Good read, but indeed the dream was confusing. You used "hand" three times and some sentences seem to only make sense if the ponies are anthropomorphic.
I imagine kneeling for ponies works like this (it was surprisingly hard to find an image on Depribooru to illustrate what I mean):
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For non-anthro ponies the first quote would only make sense if Sunchaser was sitting, and the second never.
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This is what happens when both you and your proofreaders write a lot of anthro and feral stuff at the same time; things slip through the cracks! Oh well, these are easily fixed for the most part, just swapping around a few words. The uses of "hand" should be corrected now. As for kneeling/sitting, I think I should just clarify that Shining is sitting, that makes it easier for him to see what's going on downstairs in the scene, and that he's staring down at his hooves rather than knees. There's examples of ponies bowing/kneeling in the show, but that's not the pose I think best works for this in my head.
That was fucking hot! I like reading gay male clop. (I'm a straight female). Loved the build up and the Daddy play. I don't know why, but that kind of clop turns me on.
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I hear yah! It's my cup of tea too; and as I've said, I write the kind of stories I want to read which means that Daddy talk really gets my motor running. I've met quite a few gals who enjoy gay erotica, so you're not alone on that. Glad to hear that not only the stallions out there can get some satisfaction from my smutty writing, but the mares too!
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It's kinda strange but I don't get the same feels for "Mama" clops, you know, older woman with younger girl. I know there was a movie about such a relationship. It doesn't have the heat a male version does.
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I would tend to agree, there's just something of primal appeal and authority about the whole "Daddy" thing, between an older/younger guy or a girl/guy with me. My BF likes the older women/younger lover thing more than I do, must just be different strokes.
You mentioned liking the build-up in stories, and that's one of the funnest things for me to write. Working up to the action is often just as hot as the sex itself; the way I see it, there's only so many ways you can write "X goes into Y" and the mechanics of sex, but there's an unlimited array of how to get there, and the play between the characters involved, what the act means to them. That's what separates erotica from pornography in my book!
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The tease is the thing! There is a straight clop by Gabriel Levedier (spelling) called "Daring Done" which has a lot of sexual tension and build up. I also like clops where there is some bondage. No cruelty, just fun.
Excuse me. The author is Gabriel LaVedier. I was close.
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I've read that one before, it's on my list of saved fics. Bondage is fun; I'll need to include some more of that in my stories! Hand, or hoof, cuffs are my favorite.
I think it would be fun if Cadance helped him with this fantasy. She is the alicorn of love and the erotic. She could be the one to dress him up, apply the make-up and maybe watch the action. She could even get involved, but NOT with Mr. Big Cocksure. THAT is how a woman emasculates a guy. Which would make HER the Big Dick on campus.
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I do like that idea, now that you mention it; Shining still being the guard captain and respected stallion in public, but giving power to his wife and his desires in private. Really fits the theme of this whole collection, I feel. I was thinking of something like that later on, when my break from this series over. I know what part three of this little story will probably be, but the 4th part might have some more "influence" from a certain eagle-eyed wife.
Cadence is kind of an interesting character to write, because how she acts isn't quite as explored in the show as the other Princesses (the Tempest Shadow comic plays with that in an amusing way). I see her as somewhat like Celestia on a smaller, more-personal scale, more aware of her surroundings and the feelings of others than she initially seems, and holding that same trickster bent to her interpersonal actions.
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I guess what set me off on that tangent is my dislike for bullies. Some people get off on being degraded. I just felt the big stallion went too far with it. It reminds me of a story I read where a small, young, sheltered man went away to college for the first time. He was housed with one of the big jocks on campus, of whom he was greatly afraid. One night, after a disappointing date, he pulled the young man from his bed and forced him to suck him off. After that, whenever the jock felt like getting off, he would force the roommate to suck him.
The young man stayed quiet, not daring to say anything. Then one night the jock brought the whole football team over and each one had a go at the young man. The next morning, he was a nervous wreck and vomiting nonstop. When he went to the infirmary, he broke down and told the nurse what had happened. The jock got transferred to another school. The young man dropped out and never returned. The story hints that he may have committed suicide. So, I guess you can see why I like for bullies to pay...even if the sex scene is hot.
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I'm big into degradation myself, but like most kinks, it's not everypony's cup of tea. I think I've mentioned this in a comment before, but the stallion in this story is somewhat based on a certain type of homophobe, a bit of a play on someone who thinks of themselves as so masculine and dominant, that they can't possibly not be straight...even while they're having sex with men. Thus, Shining and the stranger are in the same boat of not being out, and both in denial of their desires, just in different ways.
That story you're describing sounds a few bit too dark for my tastes though, I probably wouldn't write something so bleak as to imply suicidal intentions on a character's part. I can see why reading something like that would make someone feel that way. Then again, bullies in most stories aren't exactly meant to be sympathetic anyway, and 4/5 times they get their due in the end.
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I understand. I kind of like degradation, too. And rape fantasies. I do like being overpowered. And what you're saying about the big stallion makes sense to me. I guess he figures that as long as he's on top, it isn't gay. Which reminds me of an interview I read with a director of gay male porn. He said not all the actors in gay porn are actually gay. Straight actors are usually used as bottoms while the gay actors are tops. The reason is obvious, but I thought it was interesting.
Oh, and the story I was quoting was from a novel, not the website. One of the characters had been asked if he had ever known any boy who was gay, and he responded with that story.
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Gay for pay is what that's usually called; some guys are willing to do that if the money is good and the work plentiful. I'd bet that a lot of women in lesbian porn do the same thing, but it's somewhat easier for them to pretend an interest in the sex because they don't have to get hard for it. That novel sounds a bit...strange. I guess it depends on the character telling that story and what that has to do with the novel's themes and plot but I digress.
I do share that want of being overpowered and interest in rape fantasies, though I find it hard to write a rape-oriented story and make it particularly interesting for me; when a character's agency in the events they're in is removed entirely by another, it loses the character-play that I enjoy writing so much. It's fine for quick gratification, but doesn't have as much to offer compared to other stories to me, unless there's another factor involved that changes or affects the character beyond the act itself. I quite like the story "My Little Drone: Friendship is Overrated." It's one of my old favorites, and that's a pretty basic rape premise; but the mental changes and loss of self in it makes it a lot more appealing to me.
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I've done rape fantasies with my husband and rather liked it. Though, one time, he did a little research before we did it and...well, it got a little TOO real. He didn't hurt me but some of the stuff he was said to me was stuff he'd read real life rapists say. It was creepy as hell and I asked him to please never do that again.
Now that I think about it, I believe it's non-con that I like. Like "Daring Done" and others of that ilk.
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There's no harm in playing out a fantasy, but one partner inadvertently taking things too far is why safe-words are a good idea; perhaps he was trying a bit too hard to make the fantasy feel more real for you? The line between thrilling fantasy and something a bit more troubling can be hard to read sometimes, especially in the moment; heck, even the difference between rape and non-con in erotica is a vague one too. To me, rape has a certain violent and overpowering control connotation to it that a story that's merely non-con doesn't have,
This story is top tier! I so want to commission you to write something for me!!!!
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I'm flattered! Glad you like it
any chance of an update?
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Eventually, but there are stories that both need to be competed and need to be updated a lot more urgently than this one does. Not that I don't have ideas of what I want to write next, though.