Bedtime for Princesses

Brush your teeth, comb your mane, go to bed. It's not that hard, but every night Starswirl risks his life to make sure that his two charges get these steps done.

Warning; Diabetes.

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RK_Striker_JK_5

RK_Striker_JK_5 #1 · Nov 2nd, 2017 · · ·

God, that brave, brave stallion. We salute you, Star Swirl!

Seriously, that was adorable.

Aquariius

Aquariius #2 · Nov 2nd, 2017 · 1 · ·

Guess I should take my insulin shot, then.

Level Dasher

Level Dasher #3 · Nov 2nd, 2017 · · ·

D'awwwww.

Tatsurou

Tatsurou #4 · Nov 2nd, 2017 · · ·

This was just too adorable!

ShadowLDrago

ShadowLDrago #5 · Nov 2nd, 2017 · 4 · ·

We need to get you two brushing before your sister tires herself out too much to listen to how your dad once beat a minotaur with a trout afterwards.”

Keep talking.

Dark Nightshade

Dark Nightshade #6 · Nov 3rd, 2017 · 1 · ·

Aww, that diabetes warning was accurate. This was so cute!

Thatguywiththeface

Thatguywiththeface #7 · Nov 3rd, 2017 · · ·

So cute

TheRandomHero80

TheRandomHero80 #8 · Nov 3rd, 2017 · · ·

" Warning; Diabetes. " HAHA jokes on you sir I was born Diabetic. Good fuzzy story though, I thoroughly enjoyed it.

The Iguana Man

The Iguana Man #9 · Nov 5th, 2017 · · ·

She had a voracious love for books, of which he was proud of

Two "of"s, there,

and a trace of his magic no held itself fast

now held itself fast

However, then they both heard books hitting the floor and looked at fortress

the fortress

as they saw Luna let out a small rawr from the entrance

Get what you're going for, but you either need to put the "rawr" in quotation marks/italics or use "roar", since it's accepted as both a noun and an onomatopoeia.

And, fortunately, Luna’s bubble was airtight as he called out,

Um, ignoring that airtight does not necessarily mean soundproof, it seems to me that putting a small child in an airtight container is not a sensible thing to do, alicorn or no.

Cute story overall. Sorry if I'm nitpicking, these are just things I noticed, and I did overall like the story.

Kikio3000