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Twilight Sparkle and her assistant Spike just came back from a lecture when they saw Starlight Glimmer in the throneroom. She held in her magic a scroll with a time charm.

Starlight Glimmer wanted to travel with this time charm and the map in Twilight`s castle to the past and change the destiny of Twilight and her Friends.

But something had gone wrong, because Sombra has dived has stolen the magic and used it himself to travel into the past. He wants to dominate his dark plan to rule Equestria.
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I apologize if you do not understand some. I have written this story with the google translator because I live in Germany and I'm not so good in English. I'm really sorry if this is the case.

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I apologize if you do not understand some. I have written this story with the google translator because I live in Germany and I'm not so good in English. I'm really sorry if this is the case.

I was about to say. I highly recommend an editor as while I know what you are generally meaning it doesn't come across well as Google translate put in a lot of words that shouldn't be there or are wrong.

https://www.fimfiction.net/group/97/looking-for-editors

I will say though the story description has me curious so I do want to read it but that will be difficult for me and a lot of others I'd imagine without an editor running clean up.

As a german I sometimes had to chuckle because of all these direct translations.:trollestia:

As soon as they had said that, they went to the castle to the thronsaal.

Thronsaal= throneroom

Ich mag die Geschichte soweit gerne, aber das Englisch ist wirklich nicht gut, wenn man den ganzen Text mit Google-Übersetzer übersetzt. Wenn du vorhast weitere Geschichten hier hochzuladen, solltest du deine Englischkenntnisse verbessern und den Text zuvor nach größeren Fehlern durchsuchen. :raritywink: Außerdem:

"I'm going to do exactly the same as Starlight Glimmer but I'm doing something different."

Ich werde exakt das Gleiche wie Starlight Glimmer machen, aber ich mache etwas anderes.
:rainbowhuh: :rainbowhuh: :rainbowhuh:

What's a "roll of cries"?

This needs some editing.

You really need someone to lock over your story Ich könnte es machen aber ob du das auch willst ist was anderes von dern fehlern abgesehen ist die story gut

Definitely need an editor but the story plot is nice.

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