Spike is Secretly a Twat

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Trick Question #1 · Oct 8th, 2017 · 5 · ·

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If Majin Syeekoh or Bronystories had written this, Spike would literally have been a vulva.

Not that I'm encouraging that sort of thing.

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Wanderer D #2 · Oct 8th, 2017 · 5 · ·

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You can't finish this story there. Come on.

Doctor Disco

Doctor Disco #3 · Oct 8th, 2017 · · ·

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You just had to, didn't you?

You also could've dedicated this to Famous in jest

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OmniFox #4 · Oct 8th, 2017 · 3 · ·

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"And I remembered that you're a dragon and you can make really, really hot fire!" she jumped, her eyes sparking so vibrantly they could have set the world aflame, "so I thought, hey, if there's anypony—or anydragon—who can get my oven working and help me get these cookies a-bakin', it's my good pal Spike! I'd only need a few flames... What do you say, you game?"

Doesn't that scream innuendo?

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B_25 #5 · Oct 8th, 2017 · 1 · ·

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Agreed. A sequel of Spike getting exposed on stream would be badass.

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B_25 #6 · Oct 8th, 2017 · 1 · ·

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This is a gorgeous little character study.

Spike is one of the worst written characters of the fadom, appearing as a mary sue more often than not. Amplifying his flaws to see what the mane six's tru reactions are was extremely clever, and painfully realistic to us would be narcissist.

My only gripe is hòw Spike is made to be the worst--which is forgivable seeing as how that was you aim. But there are some facts that you tweak that are slightly untrue, one case being how Spike ran away because he thought Twilight didn't love him.

Overall, everything comes together nicely, and I'm so glad to see that you've already become a better writer than I. Please don't ever stop.

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Arisa-chan #7 · Oct 8th, 2017 · · ·

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I'm dead. This is one of the funniest things I've read in a long time.

Majin Syeekoh

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Majin Syeekoh #8 · Oct 8th, 2017 · 1 · ·

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It’s funny you bring that up, actually, because of this recent Discord convo.

Majin Scarecrow-Today at 4:52 PM
Not a bad assumption to make
Generally you have to talk to be a twat
Unless you’re a vagina person
Majin Scarecrow-Today at 4:53 PM
As in an anthro vagina

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Trick Question #9 · Oct 8th, 2017 · · ·

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I stand by my claim.

Also, the fact that you're a Story Approver now gives me mixed feelings. Does Evictus need approval for their stories anymore?

Majin Syeekoh

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Majin Syeekoh #10 · Oct 8th, 2017 · · ·

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I’m not sure we should derail the story comments any further. Any questions you have can be directed towards me on Discord.

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MW4Life #11 · Oct 9th, 2017 · · ·

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Wait wait there pissed caused he didn’t do what they asked I hope you make a sequel where spike responds by saying something like well I ain’t your your personal slave I have my own life

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sejox #12 · Oct 9th, 2017 · · ·

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I wanted to down-vote this... but the premise of the fic is "being a twat", so most of my reasons were down the road with that...

Anyway while i admit that spike would have do that to pinkie or the walls, (put aside rainbow and fluttershy, the guy was so full of food that he barely managed to stay alive), i must say that Spike would have tell twilight that he wanted a free of chores day.

Anyway... I lack of enough reasons to dislike this.

Btw: you are a good writer, you magnificent bastard

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All Art Is Quite Useless #13 · Oct 10th, 2017 · · ·

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I may write a sequel. If I do, it'll probably be as another chapter on this story, rather than releasing a whole new fic for it. I do agree that the public intervention could be pretty entertaining.

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