Twilight had long since hidden her love for Cadance with a special charm that even hid her dreams from Luna. During the invasion however she loses it now the secret is out how will she handle this?
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I'm always happy to see some Cadance x Not Shinning, but this story is a bit weak, kind of rushed, not really building up for the end.
Biggest problem: you don't really know when to use a comma (,). Several places where lacking it, could have made this story about 20% better.
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Thank you for the advice this was a sorta first attempt so feed back is nice I am always trying to improve as an author. Though next time I'll try to find an editor also I agree Cadance shipping has a lot of potential like Twidance. Anyway thanks!
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i would love to see and read more
Great story, HOWEVER I would like to to point out that Twilight could have died, Twilight was vulnerable to the changelings, Chrysalis could have easily killed Twilight but thankfully didn't, however the possibility wouldn't have happened if Twilight's friends, brother, and mentor believed that the Cadance was fake! Everyone around Twilight abandoned her, i would expect atleast an apology.
Plus I don't really think Cadance would even want to marry Shining Armor to begin with if she found out what Twilight's brother said to her at the wedding.
That would probably be an interesting sequel.