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Starlight, unable to accept that she was in the wrong, becomes obsessed with Twilight and her friends after they came to her town and defeated her; ruining her perfect world. As she hides in the mountain caverns, she starts to forsake her demented ideals and sets her sights on one goal: Revenge.
Based off of Johnathon Young's Metal Cover of Hellfire from Disney's The Hunchback of Notre Dame.
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Friendly word of advice, link to that video.
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I tried, but it didn't work. It just led to a dead video.
Absolutely brilliant. I would say do a sequel that involves what happened between this moment and the season five finale.
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How would that work? Do you have a suggestion?
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During season 5, she was very well hidden but she was seen. Have her stalk Twilight. During the "Amending Fences" episode she was hiding behind a menu in the restaurant that Twilight and her friends took Moondancer to. My Starlight is really good at unlocking doors so what you could have her do is break into the archives, break into the Starswirl wing and acquire that scroll with his spell on it since she did have it in the finale.
Go into detail her finding a way to alter it and then end the sequel with her breaking into Twilight's castle before she got home from that speech she gave to Celestia's students.
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Hmm... I'll take into consideration. But, even if I decide to do it, I have a lot on my plate at the moment. Sooo, It would take time.
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Oh, wait! I got it working!
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I know how it is to have a lot on my plate. I have so many things I want to get started but a lot of things I have to get finished. If you decide to do it, I'm looking forward to it.
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Oh, and welcome to the Army of Madness. 
I think I'm gonna do it just for you.
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Thanks and hey, once I finish up on a chapter in my "Celestia's Views" story I'm working on, I'll check out some of your other work.
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Alrighty then. I can say for certain that they have gotten better reviews than this one.
1 like and 4 dislikes...
Oh, well. I enjoyed writing it and at least someone enjoyed reading it. 
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I know a lot of people are huge on the whole like to dislike ratio but I am one of those types who are thrilled about the upvotes and doesn't let the downvotes bring me down. If I can make someone's day even a little brighter by writing something they like, that is what matters to me.
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I'm with you, sister... or brother? You just seem like a sister judging from your username.
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Brother....Storm is the nickname my cat had when I was young (Stormy) and Luna because she is one of my favorite ponies.
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Right; got it.
I don't know why people don't like this story! It's poetic, has good writing, conveys emotions well, and everything else is great too! I've read through the comments and I agree with StormLuna, make a sequel!
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And I will write a sequel... some time.
Why, thank you.
I really don't know why the people that read this when I first released it didn't like it. My only guess is that they downvoted it just because Starlight is the star of it.
Granted, I myself hate Starlight with a burning passion, but I wouldn't downvote a story just because she stars in it. 
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That's great that you'll write a sequel! I'm definitely reading it. Also, I think it's less about Starlight being the star of it and more about the fact that the second half was kind of like a poem, which I personally like, but I guess others don't.
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I dunno. Starlight seems to be a bit of a downvote magnet.
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Maybe, but I've seen stories with Starlight that have mostly positive feedback. I don't know.
Oh thank the heavens you didn't go the route I thought you were gonna go.
Given your passionate hatred for Starlight, I assumed you would simply make her totally dislikable. But you didn't; I actually find myself sympathizing her throughout this story at the same time as fear her and her thought process. This is a mare who has lost EVERYTHING. All that she worked so hard for ripped away from her unceremoniously because six mares got in her way. And now she's on the run, contemplating her thoughts and plans for revenge.
I do have ONE issue with this story is...well, as a Christian, I was very uncomfortable with the fact that she was praying to God here, because the way Starlight and this story portray Him...it was disgusting. I'm sorry. I can't help but feel that this story wrote Him out as the Devil. And that...really made me feel uncomfortable.
Like I said before, there are things I see in something you might not; the same goes the other way. I do not think this makes you morally questionable, as you probably only meant for Starlight to view it like this.
I give this an 8/10.
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Just because I hate Starlight doesn't mean I can't write her in a likable/sympathetic light.
Let me clear things up here.
Starlight was just doing what a lot of False Christians do. It's made clear that she's crazy and delusional, so of course her view of God would be twisted. Didn't you notice she only called to Jesus one time and that was because she wanted Him to do something for her? That was meant to symbolize that she is using God and religion as a tool to excuse and justify her actions. The same goes for a lot of False Christians. It doesn't mean anything except that Starlight is an arsehole.
Feel a little better about it now?
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...oh thank the heavens!
I dunno about you, but I'm not a big fan of writing characters to be entirely dislikable just because they're my least favorite character (unless they're portrayed to be dislikable). It's more fun to give them actual depth, and I feel complimented when someone thinks I like a character I hate because that means I wrote that character spectacularly.
As for your reasoning, yeah, I do feel a tiny bit better; the moment still gives me the heebie jeebies, but I do understand the direction you were going. And as sad as it is for Starlight's case, at least you definitely portrayed it as a true descent of madness.
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And the opposite has actually happened to me: See, I wrote Adagio in Saving the Siren to be a monster and, apparently, some people thought I hated Adagio because of it. 
Totally with ya! I mean, if the writers aren't gonna make them likable, might as well do the job yourself.
And isn't the fact it gave you the heebie jeebies a good thing since that's the feel I was going for?