An attempt at a deconstruction and application of the widely-taken "Rainbow Dash is a homosexual" fanon belief. Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash are up to their usual antics when they choose Applejack as their next victim for pranking. However, one slip-up makes everything take a detour to tragic proportions. This oneshot is also told by the POV of Pinkie Pie, and following chapters will be told from third-person perspective.
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Huh. I wonder what she saw at the bottom.
895063 If you're being serious (it's the internet and sometimes it's hard to tell these things), I would suggest that you read the lines starting 'When I got to the bottom[...]' and then think about it for a bit while re-reading the end of the story. All the information is there.
And to the author, good job. I'm not really a fan of 1st person narrative so I can't offer much comment on the writing, but the story is engaging and your...um...shall we say 'mechanism' for spoilers' sake, for kicking off the plot is very well thought out, if a bit abrupt in how it is unfurled to the reader.
My main question, though, has got to be 'Why on earth is this called My Yellow Diary?
' closely followed by 'Where could you possible go from here?' This seems like a very well executed, self-contained one-shot and I'm curious to see what have left to say with it.
Good work overall, though
Oh, also, I'm assuming the 'deconstruction' bit of RD's sexuality is going to come later cos, y'know, right here and now that boat seems to have sailed, if you know what I mean.
895126 I was being serious, and I'm also kind of an idiot.
895156 That's cool, I wasn't trying to sound insulting. I was mainly just protecting myself from looking like a moron; I'm easily trolled
But yeah, the answer's subtle, but it's there.
WHY RAINBOW WHY? COME BACK!
895126 Thank you very much for the criticism! It means a lot to me.
The title itself is a derivation from the term "yellow journalism", which is a type of journalism that can be exaggerated to ridiculous levels. It's a reference to the interpretation that Pinkie Pie, in the state of mood that she's in, may or may not be exaggerating the actual feelings of everyone involved within the situation. The belief that she's a horrible pony because she made an error in judgement that ultimately led to the demise of several innocent lives, and when she found herself unable to help Rainbow Dash snap out of it in time are two of the most prominent examples. It is also an implication at a "behind the scenes" fact - something that will indeed come in a later chapter. The first-person POV was meant to emphasize the reader's inability to tell what Pinkie is thinking and what's actually taking place.
"Where can I possibly go from here?" That too shall be explained in a later chapter.
So do stick around, would you kindly?
Wow great story
I mean, you explained allot of emotion in not that many words and I think you did a awesome job!
I really like it so far! I think you also took a quite grimdark turn with this story, due to the whole massacre and injuries and such.
Especially the ending was grimdarky, but one thing:
Really? WHY RD?
895202 Don't get me wrong, I don't have anything against RD. Matter of fact, she's one of my favorite out of the Mane 6. But, she just happened to fit perfectly for this particular story.
...I didn't mean anything by it! Honest!
895198 Oh right? Well, 'Today I learned' etc.
Yeah, I think I'll my eye on this, see where-
>would you kindly?
Oh god dammit.
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/begins crying.
I never cry at stories. The only other story I've ever cried at was A Rose Reverie, by Josh Meihaus. That... those magenta eyes. That... how could Rainbow Dash do that? Say she was going to visit her... oh. I get it now. But leaving a "surprise" at the bottom of the lake? That was just... just painful. And Pinkie, leaving too? Who wants to guess next comes Applejack? And Fluttershy? Then Rarity? It's all falling apart
Geez why was everypony so quick to judge Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash, yes one colt died and several other ponies were hospitalized but they said they were sorry, geez appearntly the townspeople or ponies in this case learned nothing from Zecora, don't judge others based on apperances!
897001
You actually cried? I'm sorry... -hugs-
897164 Actually, all of those ponies also died later on in the hospital, hence the reason why Pinkie Pie referred to herself and Rainbow dash as "mass murderers".
897189 All the same Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash felt gulity about it and WERE going to apologize before some stupid pony started a fight, and Applejack appearntly held a grudge, I think Twilight should contact Princess Celestia about this!
Dear Princess Celestia,
Today I learned that ponies will go to any lengths to end their suffering. Today, two of my friends ended their sufferings, without coming to us. We could've helped. We would've helped. But they didn't see an alternative. Why? Why, Princess Celestia? Why would they leave us here? The both of them? How could they do this to us, and just leave us here? Why were they so greedy?
Your Faithful Student,
Twilight Sparkle
That'd be a great letter.
897287 ...oh Celestia, you may just given me a new idea...
897354
/feels honored.
If I can give a great writer like you an idea, I have to good at something
How did RD manage to stay at the bottom of the pond
900971 I'll let you think about it. And I'll give you a hint: on her own, she'd be floating...
901447 OH BOY!!! She brought a friend?? Oh, wait...
Wow. This is...I really just don't know what to say. I expected it to be sad but not...this.
You've done an amazing job with the emotions and things here, and I really can't wait to see what happens with the later chapters. You're writing is awesome. Your plot so far is fantastic. And how, at the end, we discover that we are, in fact, reading Pinkies letter is just...so sad. The fact that Apple Jack saved her should have let her know that she was forgiven somewhat, in the very least. I'm left with so many questions though. What is Apple Jack going to think, is she going to blame herself? What about Fluttershy when she sees that Pinkie blamed her? Or Princess Celestia, when she discovers what happened, whenever that may be. I just...I'm eagerly waiting for the rest of the story. Keep up the amazing work.
(Oh, and I don't expect you to answer those questions or anything, since they'll probably be revieled in the story, just letting you know where my thoughts are).
902409 Out of the many comments on here, I think I like yours the best. I always love the ones that ask the hard-hitting, armor-piercing questions that make me stop and think.
I can tell you this: I don't actually plan for Celestia to have a role in this story. As for Fluttershy, her particular role is debatable. I am still leaning towards her sticking to being a simple background character, but now that you mention her, I can't help but get ideas. Maybe she'll come in, maybe not. I'll have to decide on it. Everything else will be answered in due time.
RD KILLED VINYL SCRATCH AND DROWNED HER
M NINGT SHYAMYLAHN BITCH
loljk
I'm sorry
I'm a tryhard comedian. Just pretend I'm not here and we can move on.
902578
Now it's time for me to ask an annoying question: Do you know how often you'll update? I know it won't be like...every day or so just because of how emotional the writing seems like it is going to get, but maybe ever week or every two weeks? I think this might just be my favorite story here so far. It's just so...awesome. I do hope it gets updated soon!
*nudges and whispers* Use Fluttershy
But in all seriousness, thank you.
914541 I'm hoping I can finish up the "Closure" Ending in the next few days, actually.
914559
That would be great! I'm looking forward to it.
This even inspired me to write a very sad story.
914777
Really? I actually inspired another to write? That makes me happy I helped another out. 
914792
Me too! :) It's only my second story on here though. But yeah, I took a small part of your plot...or I guess plot idea...or whatever. and then with a comment I also read here made a story. It just hit me. So I guess I owe you a double thank you. One for writing this story and letting me read it, the other for inspiring me.
Please continue this
958547 Not to worry, I will. Cross my heart and hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my--
OH GOD WHY
Nice fic though, I thought it was a little more 'sad' than 'dark'.
There's so many... contradicting views here. I love the chapter, by the way. But I'm so lost right now, I don't even know. I thught Dash killed herself because of the apple scenario, but then there's a rainbow kitchen knife in here too...
Why i so lost?
960129 Rainbow Dash didn't kill herself because of the apple incident. What she dealt with was a life-long problem of her being constantly categorized as a homosexual simply because of her looks and behavior. The recent incidents were just minor catalysts to push her over the edge.
As for the "rainbow kitchen knife"... well, I'm not sure where you got the term from. But in the basket Applejack shows to Pinkie, it says that there is a kitchen knife along with the mess of the mane Rainbow Dash had cut off. Sorry if that got you confused, I tried to do the best I could.
897287 The letter should have been in response to the townsponies still holding a grudge even when Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash WERE going to apologize, yes sorry doesn't fix the problem but what would you rather have them do apologize and have them try to patch things up or just assume that just because one prank of theirs backfired and killed some ponies that they are murderers and deserve to be punished, I don't know about you but I do know that Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash have been in town for years and pulled dozens of harmless pranks before that alone should be proof that they never meant to harm anypony but no everypony except for Fluttershy, Rarity, and Twilight focus on the fact that several ponies died, yes it was a terrible thing but looking back on it and holding a grudge doesn't help matters nor does it bring the dead back to life, heck that itself is actually confirmed to be an illegal act of magic, but alas the townsponies for whatever reason seem to think that becasue of what Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash did that violence is the only answer, for that all those ponies should be thrown in the dungeons or banished to the moon until they learn their lesson.
(I apologize for the rant but it's just something that really bugs me, I mean really whatever happened to love and tolerance!)
Wow, this is waaaayyyy more emotional than I had expected
Goood job! 
I think you really know how to show all the emotions and grief and such in a situation like this.
I might be a little bit biased due to Rainbow Dash being my favorite pony
But yeah, like I said keep up the good work!
Moral for this chapter never judge others for their romantic intrests if they say they're straight, bi, or lezbian then just let them be that way, if you don't approve of who they like then just don't talk to them, myself I'm as straight as can be but that doesn't mean I want everyone around me to be the same, if someone I know wants to spend their life loving the same gender then that's fine by me. Yet another example of why the ponies in this town clearly need to be punished, because of them Rainbow Dash took her own life, all because they wouldn't shut up about her being a lezbian when she said she wasn't!
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Oohhhh. It's the whole deconstruction thing isn't it? I'm not very good with subliminal stuff. Just big words.
So... she cut off her mane. It's quite symbolic, though I'm also quite good at making things sound stupid. Just ignore me for the time being while I figure out what deconstruction is.
I agree with Golden Delicious up there, no clue what deconstruction actually is. But still...this is an amazing and emotional chapter. I'm relieved Pinkie was saved. I can't wait for what the next chapter holds.
961185 You mean the next "ending". "Closure" was just one of many, as well as the closest thing I allowed myself to get to a "good" ending. The next ending features Pinkie Pie...well... actually following through with the suicide without anyone to stop her.
961217 Yeah, lol. As long as I'm reading something you wrote. You're awesome. And besides, this story has me captivated. So I'll take as many endings as I can get. Though I'm afraid of the tears the next one might bring...
yays good chapter :3
I thought Pinkie should suffer the same fate as RD, but then the homosexual issue set me, excuse the pun, straight
975348 "snort snort"
975831 god dammit, I still have no idea what that is meant to mean
qualification: you're one of the best ponyfic writers
the good: you have a pretty good grasp of pinkie's voice and a GREAT grasp of dash's. you mostly gave each scene its due, though it felt rushed around the middle after fluttershy's "lie" and before dash woke up. i like how dash didn't fight back and that pinkie didn't realize that. and pinkie's reaction to the note was spot on, and swimming down to the bottom of the lake was actually chilling.
the bad: lead paint? really? now there's a plot device that reveals itself as one to the naked eye. the story that you meant to be focused just felt encumbering; i wanted to know more about the world. i could have used a scene of walking through the hospital apologizing to families of victims like you hinted at in the scene where applejack tells them what happened. some things you were shooting for didn't work: there's no sense of unreliable narrator because the actions that i now realize, after reading your comment, you were intending to come across as doubtable (e.g. "readily returned hug") just read straight in context. also, the ending (which you left ambiguous in order to make multiple endings) was just annoying as it prevented this story from standing alone as a journal entry/note. overall, it seems like a premature concept you stretched out too far, and the quality of the writing didn't merit the length.
it's nice to see skilled writing in the pony universe; unfortunately, that bumps it up a level and makes me judge it more harshly. i'm not downvoting this, but i didn't like it.
991318 Well, I thank you for at least giving your thoughts on it instead of deciding to be the guy who thumbs down what they don't like and leave no comment.
I appreciate the critique and the time you put out of your busy schedule for writing it, even if you didn't like the story. I'll try to keep these mistakes in mind when I write the next one.
I can acutally see the towns ponies reacting like that there's one question why didn't Dash fight back? she's a pretty strong mare i would think she could take a few down before going down herself, i feel bad for Dash she had go through all that just because of how she looks so i guess the next chap will have Pinkie not being saved.
Hmm... This is interesting, and I can't find any grammatical errors after reading through.
I heard you needed an editor - if you want, I can go through and scour this for other issues.