Principal Celestia, tired and feeling well past her prime, leaves in search of adventure. She finds someone who will change her life.
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This needs more views i love it have a like good dor or madam
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Wow this is very good I like the chapter 2 i'm now rushing for three.
I'm about 1/2 to 2/3 through Chapter Two. It's slow going, not because it's difficult, but because I'm detecting little, but important, tidbits scattered within. If one was just concentrating on the "action", they very easily would blend into that background.
Blend; not get lost. Rather like saffron in a recipe (if done right, that is).
So I catch myself skipping back again and again, isolating that from the background, seeing them slowly build a picture of Celestia that grows clearer and clearer the more of those "pieces" I find.
So far I feel that it gives a good insight into the complexities of Celestia's deep-seated issues, and starts building the foundation for her (long-submerged) hopes and dreams.
As for the "tidbits", how about first a hypothetical example? For instance: "John trudged along, the gloomy sky making it difficult to navigate, as well as draining any desire to continue onward." The "tidbit" here is "gloomy sky", a description easily subsumed into the sentence.
Now, actual examples (at least, for me): " . . . leaving a trail of pre-cum in its wake that thoroughly glazed her flabby ass crack," and "Though she was desperately ashamed and embarrassed by her body, right then, she really wanted to be seen being mounted by a fifty stone creature that by all accounts shouldn’t exist and taking his huge cock like a mare in heat. "
The two tidbits there being "flabby ass crack" and "desperately ashamed and embarrassed by her body", both of which are seamlessly embedded into the substance of the descriptions. But . . . this is a dream, not reality. So . . . why such negative descriptions? Because dreams often reflect the conscious mind's positives and negatives. It's already been established that Celestia is "feeling her years" and feeling "unworthy and unattractive", but those scattered "tidbits" really make clear the depths of her body image issues, as well as her feelings of unworthiness and unattractiveness.
At least, that's my two bits.
Having finished this chapter, there are two things that stand out for me. One is, well . . . GMTA? ::grins:: The part about “inner demons” strikes a cord with me, both on a personal level, and because it is very similar to something I’d written in TTTB. The second is that Cheerilee’s synopsis of her dynamic vis-a-vis Dominant/submissive is quite spot on. For anyone that has ever curiously wondered what/why about D/s, that was a perfect, concise description.