A group of 6 human fighters travel to another dimension to escape the Devlark, an alien race of monsters bent on killing anything there masters tell them to. This group of fighters travel to equestria to escape them only to be followed.
How will the group react to the peaceful life of equestria?
How long will that peace last?
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One of your main problems is an obvious lack of editing, which is obvious because of your frequent spelling errors and poor grasp of grammar. Try proofreading harder in the future. With that said, this isn't a bad story, it just needs to be cleaned up more.
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Thanks for the feedback I was starting to feel like this was a lost cause. I will definitely keep that in mind from now on since I know someone is actually reading this.
Is this a crossover?
8197683 nope this is all just random things my messed up mind thinks of