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We often remember our childhoods as times full of carefree fun. But it's easy to forget that it isn't always easy being a kid. Sometimes, growing up can be really hard.

A collection of stories from each of the Mane Six's childhoods, set several months after gaining their cutie marks.

Also, BIG THANKS to camlmn106 (a.k.a FreeqAxel) for helping me edit this thing. A brohoof to you, good sir.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 31 )

Wow. This is great. Keep up the good work! :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

Great story, I still cant wait for Rainbow's part! The chapter was great. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

I can`t wait for the next chapter. I bet it`s gonna be :rainbowkiss: So awesome!!

I hope you do pinkie pie next!

This is a well-written story with a lot of potential! Good job!

FAVED, very well written, heart felt and fun to read. Can't wait for more, especially Twilight's part!

Odd, I thought SB was born until much later.

i had this i dea months ago but when i came out with it i found i am not the best writer, i am glad someone else could come out with something more well written

Aww, I love this story! It's heartfelt and exceedingly well-written. I can't wait to see how the handle the others. Faved!

So far so good. Can't wait to see the rest.

Nice. Well written.

Rarity's mom is a bitch. :flutterrage:

Awww! Your stories are heartwarming!

Rarity chapter soon please.

edit: fuck am I retarded

Can't wait to read the next one. Wonder who's it gonna be! :pinkiehappy:

YAY an update!

I Loved this chapter because I think poor Pinkie's past is not explored in enough detail, ever. You did a fabulous job showing part of it.

Keep up the good work. :raritywink::pinkiehappy:

Both fantastic stories, I wonder who is gonna be next.

I see the Pie family's names are very much head cannon now :D

Great story!:pinkiehappy:

You read my first story, so I thought I should read yours. And I'm glad I did! This could easily have been something much simpler about Rarity supposedly learning her lesson and practicing on her own until she could get her things back, but you made it much more real by including the complication of Sweetie Belle. I have a younger brother myself, and this story really brought back memories of learning what it's like to not be the one your parents are always fussing about anymore.

It was also nice to see Rarity's dad approach the problem of her magic from an outside perspective- he can't cast spells himself, so he identifies with his daughter a bit more that way, but he's also open to the fantastic possibilities of unicorn magic, which help him come up with ideas that someone who sees it as a chore wouldn't think of.

The ending was good, too- we have a triumph for Rarity's magic and creativity in her solution to bringing down the box and the sewing machine, but also the kind of crisis that it sometimes takes to remind the parent of a newborn that their older child must still be important as well. And the last exchange reminds us that... well, you're never really going to stop wishing your parents would take your sibling back. Until you do. :twilightsmile:

There were a few grammatical errors in this story, but the writing itself is top-notch. And the next chapter is about Pinkie Pie! :pinkiehappy: That should be interesting.

“Everything is about parties with you, isn't it? Don't you even care about rocks anymore?”

:rainbowkiss: Oh I am going to enjoy this. I was hoping for a story of life on the rock farm... and seriously, Pinkie, you can't party all the time. That would destroy the meaning of the phrase "special occasion."

Ooh, a lecture on how petriculture works! :pinkiehappy: I'd rewrite the sentence about the "slow, tedious process", though; it seems a bit oddly put together.

“Hide and seek. You hide, and I'll count to a hundred,” said Bellamina. Isabella gave her a strange look, but then she smiled.

Oh, dear.

Nice detail on the root cellar. I like that you give the rock farm and the Pie family some history with the recollection of Granny Pie and the supposed ghost.

The story of Hearth's Warming all year round is fun too. I wonder if that's a deliberate Fairly Odd Parents reference or just one of those stories that anyone can think up in order to prove a point.

There's an extra word in the sentence featuring "grapes".

Huh. Again it looks like you're expanding the story beyond the boundaries of my expectations by including more family members. If that pattern keeps up, Rainbow Dash's and Fluttershy's stories should be very interesting indeed. Not to mention Twilight Sparkle and her new dragon companion.

I like the implications the phrase "both her pretty dresses" brings to mind... but on a similar note, if Pinkie has so few toys, why don't we get to know what they are? I'm curious now.

The sentence that references Isabella and Bellamina's love of plain old rocks has two spaces in a row.

Ow. I mean, I saw that coming, kind of, and I understand what it's like not to want to clean your room for someone who's not going to spend time in it anyway, but still... ow. :pinkiesad2:

When Pinkie's mane tangles up again, her mother uses the wrong word to tell her so- "your" means belonging to you; "you're" is short for "you are".

"I'd change it right now to rock farming cutie mark, just like mom's.

I think you mean "to a rock farming cutie mark".

Sweetie, nothing could make stop being a part of your family.

I think you mean "make you stop".

Damn. That ending was adorable. I like that Pinkie Pie learns several lessons in rapid succession, but in a way that feels very organic, with all of them applying to her situation in different ways.

For the sake of racial parity (not purity), the next chapter should be about a pegasus.

That reminds me- do you think you'll tie these stories together somehow, or will publishing them as one story just be like an anthology format?

One last thing. If you still want to know what Apple Cinnamon did, PM me and I'll tell you.

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Thanks for all your little catches. My editor didn't spot those, so I probably would have kept on ignoring them forever. I don't know what you're referring to about Fairly Oddparents, but the reference is from a story called, "The Week of Sundays."

Damn. That ending was adorable. I like that Pinkie Pie learns several lessons in rapid succession, but in a way that feels very organic, with all of them applying to her situation in different ways

Thanks! I figured somepony as sweet as Pinkie deserved an equally sweet ending. (terrible pun is terrible) As for the next chapter, I agree and I'm already working on it. Progress has been slow, since I've been doing Newbie Artist Training Grounds over on EQD and haven't been inspired to write much.

I don't plan on tying the stories together really at all. They're supposed to be short little stories of the mane 6, a little after they got their cutie marks. Thanks for all your comments.

Ohh my god update! Yayyyy! Great chapter, good job!

As an older sister who got a new baby sister when she was still young. I can definitely remember days where it felt like my parents didn't have any time for me and didn't care. Thankfully I didn't have to get as hurt as poor Rarity to be reminded that they still loved me just as much. This is a very touching piece.

*Grins* It can be hard for kids to learn that the big kids don't always have their best interests at heart. not to mention having the big kids learn they're not as tough as they thought they were. Very nicely done. this really fit with Dash nicely and her Dad was a beautiful touch.

Sun Dancer and Thunderhead actually got on my nerves. :pinkiegasp:

I love these stories. :heart::heart::heart:

Very sweet, I want to see the reconciliation between AJ and her aunt though.

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