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Shadowlord

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King of Madness
King of Madness #1 · Apr 16th, 2017 · · ·
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Now, that was awesome! You captured Scorpan and Tirek's personalities perfectly.

Scorpan - A benevolent gargoyle that only wants peace and loves his brother no matter what he says or does.

Tirek - An irredeemable, power-hungry monster that would destroy the entire world just for more power.

The way the two verbally clashed was expertly done. Although, you may want to work on your sentence structure. Regardless, this was really good.

Shadowlord
Shadowlord #2 · Apr 16th, 2017 · · ·
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8100122 too many commas?

King of Madness
King of Madness #3 · Apr 16th, 2017 · · ·
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8100192 No. I was referring to the fact that a lot of the sentences blended together when they shouldn't have been.

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