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I’m guessing this is one of your first stories you’ve written as they pacing is so rushed it’s painful. I figured it’d get better as it goes on but ugh I can get that far the pacing leaves me so lost most the time and it’s so rushed. The fight scenes are poor and rushed and it’s over so quickly without him really getting hurt that it makes him look to be a marry Stu add the fact that he gave absolutely no fucks when he appeared there not even prepared for
It or anything but just accepts it in a nanosecond it’s painful. I hope to see this edited later on with better pacing and the scenes actually being more filled and him not looking like such a marry Stu so until then I am sorry but I can not continue this story of yours. It’s just too painful and ruined by the fact I’m lost in it quite often due to how rushed it is. So once again I am sorry but I can not continue this story.
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I've been there with a few stories too but well I just hope you come back to it later good luck finding another read I hope to see more comments on here from you later :D