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Tropical Applejack


All bubble-blowing fillies will be beaten senseless by every able bodied pony in the bar (bar).

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Troubleshoes makes just enough money to scrape by. It's safe to say that his bad luck of ruining four out of every five meals he tries to make isn't helping, nor is his head feeling any better after accidentally banging it for the thousandth time on his shelf of memoirs. However, in here you will find that both Pinkie Pie and Discord seek to help him take charge and get a sense of control over his bad luck. What begins as simple lessons escalates into deeper connections. Question is, who will win whose heart?


Inspired by The Strangest of These and created with direct permission of the author.
Rated Teen for language and possible implications later on.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 8 )

Nice start! I like Troubleshoes' voice for this, and the way he describes Pinkie is lovely. This is one to keep an eye on.

7981872 Thanks for favoriting it! And thanks again for that damn inspiration; it was superb.

Rated Teen for language and possible implications later on.

What kind of implications? Why isn't there a Discord tag?

You really have a great Idea here! This looks to be amazing if you play your cards right.

A couple small errors:

We'd mess around in the fields, telling jokes and sipping our juice boxes or telling jokes or singing and dancing.

telling jokes is here twice

Object after object fell onto my head after the shelf broke: a picture, a book, a bucking anvil.

Why is there an anvil on his shelf which he knows he hits his head on commonly?
Otherwise Keep up the good work dude(ette?) ~:derpyderp2:

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First error will be taken care of.
The anvil is just there for slapstick.

Thanks for looking this over! And yes, it's "dude."

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Possible sexual implications or innuendos.
There was a Discord tag, but I removed it for the time being because he isn't actually in the story yet (or at least not yet a significant part of it).

An interesting start, looking forward to more!

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