I was once a pony with a normal life.
Then came the day that changed it all.
I had to protect her, no matter what happened to me as a result. It was the right thing to do. I hadn't stopped them before, so I had to then. I couldn't let her take the pain. So I took the blame and the pain.
But I deserve it. I didn't stop this before, so I should take it now. It's my own fault for not trusting my instinct... I lost all hope, I broke.
But I didn't shatter. For I am a shadow of the dusk...
Awesome cover art made by DinkyUniverse!
Updated as of 2/20/17.
Rewritten as of 4/8/17.
Tell me how this one-shot went! Now that I've rewritten it, and hopefully improved it, I think more people will enjoy it. Considering the 10/1 ratio though, people apparently already liked it. 
I liked it, it's very short and to the point, something like a note you would find in a game, that fills in a little bit of background. It definitely has potential for expansion.
7951038 Uh, thanks? I was just in the mood for something vague, not something that should be taken too seriously. But it fills in a lot of details on what the heck happened to my OC, which I'm currently writing a novel about (coming out Summer 2017! Ya, I'm slow. I want to finish it before posting it.). I probably won't go about expanding it, because that's just what it. A background info filler. But maybe someday I will actually do a detailed one...
Also, thanks for the fave!
7951045 Well, that's what I meant by expansion. Maybe not writing a story about this specific character, but going on about the filly, and maybe about how she remembered this character and giving more information on him, or even just keeping it vague to the imagination of the readers. Either way, the story was great.
7951305 Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. The character will meet Applejack (the filly) in the future story. I was even thinking about making another past story showing the relationship between AJ and the character, Dusk Shadow. They sort of had a mother/daughter relationship. So I'll probably write a story, which will be A LOT more detailed. I just wanted to give this style a try, if you know what I mean.
.... Yeah, this story was a little bit vague, but well written. I don't think it would have hurt to add in a little bit of extra details here-and-there to help spruce up the narrative, thus giving the readers more context clues towards what you were trying to explain (like the sixth sense). Otherwise, I enjoyed it. Good Job!
7951368 Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll probably add a bit more to it during the weekend, when I'll have time.
If I didn't follow. It took me a moment to read that correctly.
Well written. A wee bit more detail would have been nice, as Nugget already said. I liked it overall.
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Glad you enjoyed it. I'll probably add some more detail in the weekend when I'll have the time. Now, off to fix that mistake...
Something like this is always hard to process. Changes that affect the future life and such.
8003753 Yes, I understand. But it is a kind of a prequel to a long fic I'm working on (don't get your hopes up, it's not coming out anytime soon) so it will be understood better when that comes out. I hope you enjoyed it though, hard to process as it was.
8012393 I did. No mater how long it takes, I'm eager for the prequel. I actually meant it must be hard to process for the main character. A good story and well made too.
Before I read this, what is the Dark tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?
8047044 It's not too dark, I just felt that it was necessary since the main character sort of is running out if hope, by the end admitting she doesn't matter. But it doesn't get very dark, more of a sad fic.
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/211585/reviewers-caf/thread/308771/reviews#comment/5894314
8079472 Thank you so much for the review, I really appreciate it. I'll get to work on improving it on Saturday, thanks for pointing out all of the problems. Also, I am currently working on something with this OC, a sort of aftermath as to what happened in the story.
That story (coming in a long time) sort of ties in with the last paragraph. "For I am just a shadow of the dusk. Gone in just a few moments, having to endure the pain while I'm gone. But now I must hope that the moon will shine from between the clouds and let me be somepony again."
The OC's name is Dusk Shadow. Here, she's relating herself to an actual dusk shadow; around for a little while before disappearing into the darkness. A spoiler alert for the sequel, but the pony who saves Dusk Shadow is actually Princess Luna. Because Dusk sacrificed herself, Twilight and her friends were able to save Luna.
When she says that she hopes the moon will shine from between the clouds and let her be somepony again, Dusk's implying that the 'moon' is Luna, and that she will 'shine from between the clouds', the clouds being Nightmare Moon. Luna being the pony that saved her, Dusk is hoping that Luna will 'shine', letting her live on. After all, a shadow can't be a shadow without its light.
Also, as for the very vague description of Applejack, I tried to inform the readers of who she was while still keeping the mysterious and vague narration.
I honestly don't know what inspired me to make this. It was a bit before midnight on a Saturday night, and it was bored. The kind of bored when you're just spinning around on your spinning chair. I then remembered I'd wanted to write something in first person for a while, and decided to make Dusk's story. I also was in the mood for something vague. This was the creation of all of that.
Anyways, thanks again for the review. It's just what I was hoping for honestly, a reject with the reasons why. Don't get me wrong, I'm not the kind of person wishing for rejects, but I knew that in the eyes of a true reviewer, it'd be a reject. I just didn't know why. But thanks to your review, I now know how to improve this story. Maybe I'll try something in this style again in the future.
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Yep, I try. I'm glad you enjoyed it. 
I, also, have reviewed your story.
It was an okay tale, but wasn't really gripping, to me anyway.
That was a neat story! I'm happy someone was looking out for my favorite pony!
Well... that was a downer... but even in the darkest hour, there is hope.
Wow! This was very well-written
. I noticed that there was not a single piece of dialogue in it, and found that very interesting. But you made it work, obviously. It was a retelling of what happened to the alicorn, and how he or she sacrificed his or her life. It was cool. I wonder who the two unicorns with the weapons were. Some kind of alicorn hunters? And why do they torture this innocent alicorn so much?
I hope the protagonist will get out of the tortures.
I feel sorry for this, Alicorn what an interesting story.
How is this finished? For me I don’t think it’s finished, will there be another story after this?