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Ligers aren't mythical animals. They are an actual hybrid animal between a male lion and a female tiger.
Just no. Another tropexample that needs to die. I know it is canon, but it disregard all of technology other sapient races of that world.
And you really are sticking with the forced pony diet, along with adding what could be a racist remark from Rarity, and conveniently forgetting that Flutters takes care of animals that also eat meat. In fact most of their pets are animals that have mostly carnivorous diets.
I am sorry, but I am going to stop reading. Seems like you are going to use a lot of the overused bad tropes. Rather stop now before you pull them randomly changing into ponies.
Keep going, it's your story. I like it. As always my offer for any help if you need it still stands. And kudos for remembering about the limited ammo. Can't wait to see what happens when they get to canterlot, im gonna get a good laugh out of the nobles reactions. Keep up the good work.
There's actually a Latin phrase that would work good with this story.
"Custode sol invictus"
"Keepers of the unconquered sun"
And one last thing, I think I know why you put the blacksmith shop in. And unfortunately, the guys won't be able to make more ammo. Even if they save the bullet casings, and have twi help them with the chemistry to make gunpowder, they would not have any primers to replace the used ones on each casing. (Primers being the thing that ignites the gunpowder) Now this could be worked around by using a duplication spell to give them more ammo, but it would kinda be like cheating. But with all this in mind, it is your story to write as you see fit. And it's still one of my favorites. Keep up the good work.
7926632 "Custode sol invictus" "Keepers of the unconquered sun" I love that.
Yes these tropes are used over and over. However, they are often used to avoid having to explain things later on in the story. It prevents some small details from interfering with the main point and subject of the story. In future chapters when I bring up meals I don't have to explain what was eaten unless it is relevant to the story line. Also, just because things start out with a vegan diet does not mean they will stay that way. I am simply writing a fun story on my spare time. (Hence the minor proofreading errors) This story was actually inspired by my daughters as we discussed the fight between Tirek and Twilight. I have a teen friendly version written several chapters beyond what I have posted here. It was originally written as a quick unfinished short story for their entertainment. Here I have decided to spice it up and write it out properly when I have the opportunity.
For your information the blacksmith shop has nothing to due with ammunition. Once that's gone its gone. I did take the easy way out however. I have never mentioned how many rounds were fired or that each of them still have. But, fear not, because unlimited ammo would defeat the purpose of the story later on. What kind of battle scenes do you have if the humans simply kill the leaders of the opposing army from a distance with deadly accuracy.
I always appreciate constructive criticism, and for that I thank you. Just wanted you to know I am not as well versed on the world of Equestria as many here are. That is the learning curve I am quickly overcoming. I am however very familiar with the mechanics of ammunition, weapons and combat strategies, having served as an Infantry soldier in the U.S. Army through multiple deployments in combat zones. Lets just say some aspects for this story have been translated from real life experiences. Which means I will ensure that the major battle scenes are epic. Thanks again for the comments and for following my story.
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So you basically did it for a cheap cop out. Already knew that. Still doesn't make it any better, or less aggravating. Which is exactly why I wouldn't be surprised if you changed them into ponies. So that you can easily have the romance be there without having to worry about it. Just hand waving it away.
Anyway, you forgot to press the reply button to who the second half is for.
7928675 the keepers of the sun was mine
7928675 and thank you for your service
7929000 Like the concept of unlimited ammo, turning them into ponies would again be counter productive to the story line. So yes there is human on pony love later on.