Trapped forever in the pages of a storybook.
Being a ruler, a benevolent one at least, means more than just, balls, expensive gowns, tea parties and paper work nuisance. As Celestia engages in a war, reflects on her time spent ruling and realizes that this is something that her faithful student must learn.
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You'd might want to get rid of that second person tag. This story is in first person. Most of us see '2nd person' and puke in our mouths... so yeah.
7901124 I see. Thank you for inform. Got the genres mixed up.
7901124 but wait. What's wrong with second person that makes people hate it?
7901601
It's typically a writing style that not many enjoy. It also resorts heavily on self insertion and is associated with anonymous. Yeah, it's a tangly mess that you don't really want to be dealing with.
7901601 Its horribly clunky to read. It just... doesn't feel natural. Third person and first person are easy to understand.
3rd person; you are watching these people; here are their thoughts and what they say.
1st person; you are this person. Here's what you're thinking and saying.
2nd person; you are this person, but you are watching that person, and you know what they say and think.
It's just... it sucks and isn't fun to read, in my opinion.
7901650 not the most proffessional critique...But I assume I should make it third person so it is better to understand?
7901670 No, no; not at all. I read it, and it's perfectly understandable. I'm saying that second person is a strange way of combining the two, and in doing so, it creates something non-desirable.
It says 0 words total... but the chapters says it has 2,071 in it. I don't get it.