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hmmm seems interesting so far cant wait for the next chapter!
Oh my seems interesting
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This looks realy intresting
It is good can't wait to see the rest of it
Luna: wait... we can kill her THEN save the changelings~
Chrys: you idiot. If you kill me I cant tell you where they are.
Luna: let me ask you a question. Would you rather NOT tell us where they are before your execution KNOWING that if you dont they'll starve to death~
Chrys:.... fuck.
7877955 that's funny but you forgot Celestia banned the death penalty. As earlier mentioned, plus Celestia isn't evil.
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Full disclosure, I usually just read the direct speech pieces so now and again I embarass myself like this.
7878344 oh I don't mind one bit of these kind of comments, I personal like the ones where they try to comment react to the chapter.
Good chapter, ironic though about not knowing Chrysalis when it was Celestia who single-hoofedly banished her to the inside of a volcano or something 1000 years ago after repeated attacks on Equestrian towns and villages.
7878482 if that was in a comic or something then I was not aware, unless that was a joke. I have autism.
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7878544 Comics, Fiendship is Magic issue 5, Chrysalis' origin story. A dragon is how the changelings escaped in the first place.
7878956 oh, well a interesting as it sounds I already have my own origin story planned for Chrysalis.
7878969 Ok then, just letting you know since you had it as if Celestia never knew Chrysalis.
7878956 Given who she is, everything Chrysalis said in the comic was very likely lies.
7879217 Despite the fact that it's suppose to be her canon origin story? I doubt she'd lie about being imprisoned in a volcano cause what would that do for her to lie there, what does she gain?
7879258 Sympathy from Twilight and her friends. Which worked brilliantly.
7879308 Personally any form of imprisonment would earn sympathy in the right light, case in point, Discord. Friendless and trapped in stone, a fate worse than death, Luna, trapped on the moon controlled by a space parasite, ect. So that doesn't really confirm a lie. Saying she was Princess Amore cursed would however if Twilight didn't know what actually happened to her by that point. Chrysalis tricked her by asking for a book and immediately trapped her and told her how she came to be before escaping. Lying about that would be pointless if she was already free.
7879557 Eh, she had no reason to tell the truth, either. It would fit perfectly well with her character to just lie about everything. Of course, it could also be true! One could never be sure with a changeling.
7879560 Well she didn't lie about her changelings needing food, main reason she invaded.
I see an interesting premise with the first chapter, however I would recommend that you proffread your writing because you often go from first to third person, which can be a bit disturbing for some. Apart from that, I think it's worth tracking this and see how it goes later.
Hmm, interesting premise, I hope it goes well for Chryssie.
Chryssie in a French maid outfit... *nosebleed*
Needs some proofreading, though.
Get a prereader, this story deserves it.
Please tell me this is still going it has great promise.