Rainbow Dash and Rarity both got what they wanted from life: Rainbow is captain of the Wonderbolts, and Rarity runs the most famous fashion boutique in Canterlot. However, when Rainbow tries too hard and hurts herself, Rarity finds herself not only furious and worried but also...in love?
Happy reading~
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When I read "The one thing I hate about this site is there is no Raridash" I immediately had to correct you.
There is some, although I don't even read them. Have you used the search by character & tag function?
849403 What I meant is there isn't much. ^^ Don't take anything I say too literally. xD Often I exaggerate.
Geez, poor Rainbow Dash. Puttin' this on watch :)
This is quite good; you've got me interested in its direction at this point! As for the pacing, its good and im also excited to see where its going!
I'd like to see where this goes. I was just wandering why I'd never seen these two paired before.
I'm enjoying it so far, Haven't spotted any mistakes. My only... not-exactly-a-complaint is it's rather fast paced (but not that badly), and you use the word alabaster a lot. That is all, I shall fave for later!
You forgot the tags you silly filly!
Okay, apparently I have no tags. I shall fix this.
I'm tracking to see where this goes.
849543 I must agree this is moving VERY fast. Too fast for my liking but the writing is still good.
Tracked!
I have never read a Shipping fic with Rarity and Rainbow Dash as the couple. Nice job on your first chapter i'm looking forward to more. 
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Not bad... the fact that there are televisions kind of threw me but I moved on.
The idea that Rainbow Dash was that tired was...weird. I hope you explain how she got into such a condition.
Assuming they don't have magic for that sort of thing, I doubt they'd let anyone near a pony that badly injured until they could do their thing. She would have gone straight into surgery.
Also, "I'm the most famous fashion designer, make way!"... really? that gets her through? How about, "Felllow element of harmony comming through!" Or even, "That's my best friend! Outta my way bitches!"
Regardless, looks like this could be a fun story so I'll keep an eye on it.
Her kneecaps have shattered
Holy shit, all four of them?! How in the nine blistering hells did that happen?
850210 Gotta agree with the whole "I'm exceedingly famous, so move your plebeian flanks!" thing. In that kind of situation, I think most of the ponies in that crowd really just wouldn't care about her social status.
I find it exceedingly difficult to believe that there is any magical procedure short of outright resurrection that couldn't be funded on a Wonderbolt's salary. Considering they're celebrities that are practically worshiped in every corner of Equestria, I'd think even rookie members of the 'Bolts would be making money hand over fist. When you know that Dash is the Captain of said team of Equestrian super-celebrities, the whole "she can't afford it" thing falls straight through the floor. Not to say you should scrap the whole scene, but you definitely need a better reason than 'the Captain of the Wonderbolts can't afford it'.
Also, isn't it canon that the 'Bolts are somehow included in Equestrian military hierarchy? If so, the Crown would probably pay for at least part of any medical expense. Governments do that even in our world, and you'd think a magical place like Equestria would be even better at providing for its citizens.
Uhhh...So either the Wonderbolts don't get paid enough or Rarity is a bank robber
Of course, this is why fanfiction is called fanfiction, because you can make your own stories and your own plots. It's the writer's idea, not the reader's. C'mon guys, seriously.
Good stuff, mesu-no-TORA.
A little fast- paced, but quite enjoyable. I look forward to more when the time comes.