So, I'm certainly interested in reading more of this. It's an idea I've played with a few times but never felt confident enough to follow through on, so it's nice to see someone else realizing it.
Mechanically, solid as ever. I didn't notice much in the way of grammar or punctuation that I found issue with (beyond subjective flow preferences). That said, your synopsis should have 'decides', not 'decided', to maintain tense with the rest of it. Your first impression is the most important, after all.
Stylistically, an improvement on your previous works. Personification is used effectively for the castle and there's some solid juxtaposition ("a familiar stranger" comes to mind), but more in the way of similes and metaphors would have helped establish mood and strengthened the mental picture of the story.
Looking forward to seeing where you go with this. May your quill stay sharp and your ink never dry.
7921468 Glad you're liking it so far. Hopefully I can keep up the quality. I'll also try to be on the look out for any other grammatical errors, but thanks for catching what you did.
7921623 Welcome. I didn't read it with a critical eye, so there might be some things I missed. I always pay attention to the synopsis though, since it's the best gauge for an author's capability; If it's chock full of errors in little more than a paragraph, on what should be the most polished part of their presentation, then odds are the story itself isn't that good.
Loved it! scary though. Cant wait to see what happens
I do hope you left this incomplete on purpose so we can see where this goes.
7919904 Oh absolutely. I've got a couple of chapters planned for this.
7919830 Would you say it's... spoopy?
7919913 Sweet! Looking forward to more!
This is by far the most interesting take on Nightmare Moon. Stay awesome!
Most entertaining diaper related fic to come out in a while.
Nice job, cant wait for more.
So, I'm certainly interested in reading more of this. It's an idea I've played with a few times but never felt confident enough to follow through on, so it's nice to see someone else realizing it.
Mechanically, solid as ever. I didn't notice much in the way of grammar or punctuation that I found issue with (beyond subjective flow preferences). That said, your synopsis should have 'decides', not 'decided', to maintain tense with the rest of it. Your first impression is the most important, after all.
Stylistically, an improvement on your previous works. Personification is used effectively for the castle and there's some solid juxtaposition ("a familiar stranger" comes to mind), but more in the way of similes and metaphors would have helped establish mood and strengthened the mental picture of the story.
Looking forward to seeing where you go with this. May your quill stay sharp and your ink never dry.
7920701 I will. Thanks for reading.
7921102 Hope I can continue to please.
7921468 Glad you're liking it so far. Hopefully I can keep up the quality. I'll also try to be on the look out for any other grammatical errors, but thanks for catching what you did.
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Welcome. I didn't read it with a critical eye, so there might be some things I missed. I always pay attention to the synopsis though, since it's the best gauge for an author's capability; If it's chock full of errors in little more than a paragraph, on what should be the most polished part of their presentation, then odds are the story itself isn't that good.