After being kicked out of the Wonderbolts academy, Lightning Dust feels like she lost everything. Her dreams are crushed. Neither of her parents are alive and they never have been since she was a filly. She lives with her Grandfather and he doesn't take the time to listen to her. She's lost the only friend she's ever had in her life due to the accident she caused at the academy.
She sets out to make things right with Rainbow Dash, but she is immediately stopped when dangers of the Everfree Forest cause a great obstacle. She escapes, but the strange events left Lightning Dust emotionally scarred.
Then, she meets a stallion while watching the Wonderbolts in the arena. A stallion who wants to help her get her hope back. His name is Sky Twister.
Cover Art by DragonAtaxia
Is Sky Twister related in any way to Sky Stinger?
7868000 You'll have to see.
Wow... just wow. I really do hope that there's a light at the end of this.
Good start this story has my attention!
Things seem to be looking up.
Wow, Spitfire, way to fire the rookie without getting her side of the story
Hopefully she finds the poster and stuff in the trash and knows how ticked off Lightning is at her and her team.
Well it seems she's just turned her life around. Great work I'm loving it so far.
nice
I like this story, but the pacing is a little off, not too much though. A very great story.
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Is there any way that I could improve in the future?
Thank you for your compliment!
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Well, what I did when I realized that my pacing was waaay off. I realized that the characters I was using didn't have a long enough train of thought. To grab a reader needs more than interesting plot, what I see a lot of accomplishing writers on this sight do right is give the characters they use a few more words to explain the characters train of thought. But like I said, the pacing isn't too off, it's certainly better than my pacing back then. You're doing a job that is going in a direction that will amaze many others, trust me.
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Okay, thank you so much for your feedback! Have a good night!
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You too.
I'm going to be honest with you, that Romance tag always turned me away from a story, because I never liked romance like that, but I'm liking this story, and the love between Lightning Dust and Sky Twister is going to be exciting to continue reading.
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Thank you so much! I'm glad that you're willing to give it a chance.
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You're welcome! It really comes down to your skills as an author.
Will you update this, cause it's hard to find a good lightning dust story.
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Sorry for not updating in such a long time. It's just I still have a MASSIVE writer's block on this. But I'm glad you like this project!
Oh good luck then.