The Galaxy And The Butterfly Who Loved It

It's hard to love somepony that doesn't love you back. It's even harder when you know you never even had a chance in the first place.

Nopony knows this better than Fluttershy.

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Swan Song

Swan Song #1 · Dec 3rd, 2016 · 5 · ·

i want your metaphors i want all of them

the frank

the frank #2 · Dec 3rd, 2016 · · ·

Beautiful. Have a fav.

Only2ndplace

Only2ndplace #3 · Dec 3rd, 2016 · · ·

Wow, what a gem of a story.
It's only a thousand words, but the emotion resonates through every sentence.
I don't know, whether you have any idea for a sequel, but if so, I would very much love to hear it.

bjorn2345

bjorn2345 #4 · Dec 4th, 2016 · · ·

Why not tag twilight? This looks like a rarishy from someone who is browsing rarity tag

Pyro Kittens In Suits

Pyro Kittens In Suits #5 · Dec 4th, 2016 · · ·

I absolutely love your metaphors, the last one is my particular favorite. Even as a short story, it really perfectly strikes the heart.

JKinsley

JKinsley #6 · Dec 4th, 2016 · · ·

Frost Flower

Frost Flower #7 · Dec 4th, 2016 · · ·

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Thank you. It really means a lot :) I'm often worried about being too purple prosey, but I'm relieved to see I used it effectively here.

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I've added Twilight so as to clarify. Thank you for your suggestion :)

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Thank you. I really appreciate your comment. Admittedly, I don't think I will write a sequel. This ficlet was written as a little one-time thing, but I can at least say I will consider it, and if I ever come up with a sufficiently good idea, I will definitely write it out.

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Thank you, Frank :)

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My metaphors are mine! Mine! :0

Only2ndplace

Only2ndplace #8 · Dec 5th, 2016 · · ·

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Ah, I can understand that. It's already a very complete story on it's own anyways :)

Peachy Keen

Peachy Keen #9 · Dec 28th, 2016 · 1 · ·

Poor Shy. I've had friend relationships like that, where you just wish you could be as intelligent as them so they could have a better friend in you, and it can make a person feel quite unworthy, so I can't imagine how hard it would be to have it be the case but instead be love. Very well done!

Sun Sage

Sun Sage #10 · Jan 19th, 2017 · 2 · ·

As.... someone who was once on the other side of that particular metaphor, I will say... 'Shy, the galaxy isn't nearly so grand as it might seem in that moment. Butterflies don't have to be quick, or grand. They are something amazing, and any galaxy that wouldn't have one would be poorer for the choice. A galaxy can be a lonely place in the absence of that quiet, awe-inspiring beauty. And, frankly? Any galaxy that could harm a butterfly, even unintentionally, is a big, clumsy, lumbering jerk of a.... hmm... I went somewhere there... eh, moving on.

So... safe to say this resonated with me. I can hope that 'Shy's experience moving forward will match the butterfly that left me behind. I believe it will; I believe she'll be stronger, and better for it.

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