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Bad mood, so no energy to spare on comments, only Nitpicks this time around.
"tried to think back at what I knew from the Ministry from Shot Chaser but honestly realized I had learned just as much," Should properly be "about"
" hell anything with a spell matrix was probably the them" Bade by
" Instead if the mohawk I became use to his grey hair curved down his neck in." Had become used
"Clover set me down as we reached the fourth floor" sat
"Clover pointed to console on the opposite side" You are lacking an a
"for unicorns it's the magical overglow, pegasi have a sonic boom." Capital letter
"Mangle let out another guttural yell as her attacks became a blur" you lack a space in front of this
" Mangle obliterated the tile floor created a crater in the center of the lobby. Mangle rested in the center of it, injured, blood drenched, and with the widest smile." Starting a sentence with a name like this is a bit clunky at the best of times, two sentences in a row puts major focus on it.