Battle scars are a constant reminder of what you survived. A scar simply means you were stronger than what tried to hurt you.
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I'm pretty sure a scar from a stab wound doesn't on its own prove you're stronger than anything.
Edit: Okay, I read the fic and here are my suggestions:
Show, don't tell. This applies both to exposition and to what a character is thinking / feeling. Telling takes less effort, but it's also way more boring to read. I read to immerse myself in a world created by the author, but there isn't really a world here to immerse myself into.
Also an editor would make this story much less distracting. There are a number of word choices and punctuation mistakes that really hold the writing back; a reader can't easily get invested if she's noticing every few words that there's something awkward or outright wrong with the story's technical aspects.
7641933 It proves that despite the wound or the scar that you're alive and stronger for it.
Nice comeback! Have a like!
7641971
What if you've developed a deathly fear of something like knives, or blood, or people who look like the person who stabbed you as a result of your experience? People sometimes get crippled emotionally and physically by some injuries and experiences. It seems disrespectful to tell them that they're stronger because of it.
7641985 You have to take into account that she was suffering from Post Traumatic Stress Disorder prior to LoE due to her transformation into Midnight Sparkle. Her actions are justifiable since she was trying to cover up the scars left behind, Sunset showed hers to prove that she wasn't alone and that she is there to help.
I really liked this story. I do agree that you could edit it one more time, but it isn't in dire need of it. Also, the ending seemed kind of rushed. I still liked it though, so please take a like. Maybe you can do a sequel? Such as Twilight talking to her friends about it, and Sunset being there for support?
7642032 yeah. I haven't written in months so I'm a little rusty.
For Pinkie's case, frosting and frosting.
Indeed it did.
Pretty good. I liked this one, because I always wondered if something happened to the two of them since they became demon ladies, ya know?
For a minute there I thought this was a sequel to another story called 'Scar Tissue'. It actually could be considered as such, even if it wasn't intentional.
7643374 Glad I wasn't the only one who thought that. I was actually surprised when I realised it wasn't a sequel. Still a decent story, even if it felt a little short.
I'm going to get this out of the way so it doesn't bug me; when I was reading I thought I was a sequel to another story since your writing is somewhat the same. Is that bad? No, you made my heart grab a tissue box.
I didn't see much of a problem with it, sure it felt a little rush but you said you haven't written for a few months so it's understandable. Over all I really like this story so you'll get a Fav, a like, and a mustache
. Keep on being Awesome xD
Hey hey hey! Look what got uploaded today!!
7651332
I just got done reading and watching this on YouTube it was really well thought out and very well written I loved the voice acting and think this is by far some of your most awesome and best work. Keep up the great work this was truly a work of art. Great job.
didn't the short she was wearing get turned into power armor or something lol
Well that was a sweet, heartwarming story.
This is a sweet story that reminds me of a similar story from after Rainbow Rocks.
EDIT: Search "Scar Tissue". I call this the unofficial sequel to that story for how fitting it feels.
I really like this. We all have scars, but we can't let them define who we are. At least that's what I got from it. This hits very close to home for me. Well done.
There's a tag for Sci-Twi now. And I could've sworn that I read a similar story elsewhere...
Quite the interesting tale. I would expect Sci Twi to be upset over the battle scars she got from Midnight Sparkle. You did a great job there, I'm definetly going to give it a like.
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Ditto
Way too short.
This was nice.
Wubcake just had to unlist this video along with some of her great videos, didn't she?
the best thing I have ever seen a vehicle called was 'an explosion powered screaming death machine.'