I can't wait for the human fleet encounter.

"Hello, i'm Fleet Admiral Badass, commander of the bad day you're having."
"You're a human?!, IMPOSSIBLE! Why do you have our princess?"
"Why do you have our colony?"
"Wha..."
*BOOOM* pony parts all over the galaxy.

RIP UEC fleet can't wait for next chapter

7783039 yeah sounds about right.

7783039 hehe.......The Ponies think themselves the strongest. Meet Humans, the one species who are too stubborn to give up and fight harder the more you try to force them to bow. Think of Humans as a fire, one that won't go out no matter how much you try to douse it.

We have fought, bled and died to stand on our own feet. Why should we bow to you?

I love this so much. Please keep this going.

"Slave take news of what you have heard to the Lunaport tell the Dragons beath and brimstone to join the fleet The dragons will not be left out of this chance to test ourselves against a new opponent. I want you on the Dragons breath and to report back to me immediately on returning." he orders unbinding the chain and pressing a button on his tactical pad earning a chime from the females collar.

Listen, I'm enjoying the story, for what it's worth. I'd be happy to proofread your work, fixing the grammar and spelling. But I just couldn't read that paragraph at all. The punctuation is nonexistent! Please, get a proofreader, this is a great story, with a brilliant plot, but I literally cannot read it!

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Seconded. It is a shame because you have a great imagination and are obviously talented at storytelling, but just not at English and literacy. You NEED a proofreader because, 10 chapters down the line, you will wear people out with the terrible spelling, punctuation and grammar.

Pros:

Nice world building for the most part.
The ponies have tech and aren't afraid to use it.

Cons:

Misspelling, walls of text (more spacing in between paragraphs makes it much easier to read.).

The biggest one for me though is the motivation of the ponies. Why are they oddly such slaver jerks?

It wouldn't be so bad if there was an explanation on why they are doing this.

I think if you worked more on the spacing of text and the reasons for why the ponies are evil here it would help the story ALOT.

At least with the Lankies there is a reason we don't get along.... Unable to communicate and resources.

So the oppressed (Thorax) became the oppressor. How ironic.

"Then we will Crush them. We need to strike fast and hard to sow fear in the hearts of the resistance!" king Thorax yelled slamming his chitin fist into the table earning a small cheer and nods of agreement from the assembled council.

you know what we humans say? "You hit me, I'll hit back, Harder!"

In fact they were quite fragile compared to the other slave races the closest to their frailty being the Tymerians. The humans made up for their frailty with belligerence, ingenuity, and ability to use knowledge as a weapon.

Right on the money!

Hmmm, it appears you forgot the minotaur, and some other notable races (yaks, thestrals, and a few others) but so far, awesome story and even more awesome, other alien-like species.

"You say that but the Resistance movements that have received the news have stepped up their attacks, and in lieu of this new attack are getting reports of Kleese, Miralo, and Tymerian Resistance groups joining forces with humans. If the Slave cast and old changelings unite against us..." the Grand General of the Royal guard began.

They really don’t understand humans, huh? You kill one of our leaders, not that bad, yeah we’re sad, but it doesn’t matter. We strike back with double the force, fueled by the anger and rage, in other words; ya focked up, big time

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Also fun fact humans can be extremely strong yet the human brain will limit it due tue it destroying our bodies also if you managed to flex all of your muscles in your back your spine would shatter

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We are such amazing beings

I will admit, this story is making me laugh like a maniac in the middle of the night.