A distress call from a distant colony has caught the eye of the North American commonwealth. The original human colonists have been forced into slavery and degradation by an invading force. With one war over, humanity will go feet first into another.
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Revenge with a side of death
7725889 it is a dish best served cold. And there is nowhere colder than space
True that prophet
Intresting... Keep going.
I'm liking where this is going.
Do you have a proofreader? This chapter is unfortunately full of spelling mistakes, and the flow of the story is affected by it.
Here are some corrections:
Thermometric- thermobaric
Sais- says
Donst- don't
Punctuation is missing at points, mostly commas when you are listing details.
Hope this helps.
7727406 no i dont have a proofreader
7727752 You should get one. I would do it, but my schedule doesn't give me the time. I can go over the chapters once they're posted though, and send you the revision via PM for you to look over and post. I can't guarantee a time frame though.
If you ask the comments someone will help.
Cool thanks
I can sense it in the words of the description that the hammer of justices is falling on anville of destruction while the fires of war burn in the hearts of angry men and women of war roaring in outrage, I can hear it the war drums that beat like the hearts of millions if not trillions of human hearts. Let the bloodshed begin!
7730728 oh ya
Your high level skills are great. You have sexy and exciting imagery, but your basics need some love. Spelling, grammar etc. Going to fav this regardless.
right towards the end starting at
I couldn't help but think of this!
"Supercarrier Manitoba" I think this is the first I've ever seen anyone reference my home in fanfiction. It feels nice. :)
9249165
Well....the NAC contains only four countries my dude, the U.S., Canada, Mexico, and 'possibly' the Caribbean Islands. I mean, there's only going to be so much stuff you can name for four countries that are part of the 'North American' Conclave.
If there's one think I know about Humanity is that while we suck, and fight among ourselves, we understand three things; we were made for war, we never give up, and... NEVER EVER FUCK US OVER!