Tea is drunk, philosophy and religion are discussed, the limits of reason and perception are brought up, between an AI God and a Mortal. Makes sense to them.
Standard Disclaimer: Mysticism, Advanced Physics, Multiple Religions
Chapters (1)
Woomod
Joined 23rd Nov, 2014 ·
Offline
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- Mockingbirb · 1.2k words · 20 5 · 599 views
- Yumi · 1k words · 25 0 · 1.2k views
Featured In1
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Stats
Page generated in 0.148 seconds
Total duration
970 users online
2,120,944 hits today, 2,073,628 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
A unique take to be sure. Most of us would probably be an easy sell, so the edge cases are often the most revealing. I get the feeling Ive seen those cards somewhere before.
Keep up the good work.
When I saw the title, I suspected a clever play on words or pun. Then I made it to the first paragraph of the story and realized that no, it was not a clever title. Merely a story desperately in need of proofreading. For reference, the word you were looking for was philosophy, with two "o"s not one.
@woomod: you have some interesting ideas, but as is, this story is painful to read. It is full of spelling errors, grammatical errors, incorrect punctuation, run-on sentences, and incorrect word choices. In many places you have sentences that are so poorly constructed I simply don't understand what you were trying to say.
I'm guessing that English is not your native language. I recommend you find a proofreader.
7619266
Like you wouldn't believe do i need one.
7618952
Is it a hard sell,or an easy sell?
Certainly there was a long period of waiting, but never rejection.
Is someone sold when they accept the inevitable or when they walk to their fate?
I may not be a Buddha but i really like this story, i do hope i find more like this.
7619266 What he said. This was painful to read: sentence structure, paragraph structure, punctuation, capitalization, and spelling all need a lot of work here.
Also, the extreme unfamiliarity with theology (both Christian and Buddhist) is out of character for someone purporting to be a formerly Christian Buddha. Of course, they could just be pretentious and Celly's pandering to them, but you don't seem like you were trying to write that story.
(I had to criticize the theology on behalf of my friend who's a theology student.)
7620412
It's been years since college(turns out you can get a bunch of theology stuff on the side when doing psych.), or even since I've been able to go to church. I certainly cannot doubt my rustiness.
As for the Buddhism...Well I was never a good Buddhist.
Your friend is free to yell at me if he likes though.
Grisues will get on the bash the author train! CHEW! CHEW, mother bucker!
The paragraph breaks start off bad. You could have cut some of them in two for the most of the dialog. Got better by the end. Needed more commas. That list was weird. Not sure how to make that better. Commas? Wheel chair girl could have used a name. The car driving girl could have used a name, in my opinion, comma. Chew chew, who who. Thumbs up for writing a story that's not good technically but doesn't want me to kill myself. I seen worse.
You have it in you to do better.
You need an editor here? Proofreader? Grab someone by the balls and make 'em do your bidding, or Diamond Tiara will bitch me out some more.
Anyone else having a problem where the level of English is so high above your head, but you can still tell there's a grammatical error, and you just can't quite find it?