• Member Since 24th Feb, 2015
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Lunasservant1985


i live to serve the princess of the night, aka the goddess of the moon aka princess luna...^^

Comments ( 21 )

So is the character "you" a human? If so you might want to add the tag.

She's got an omelette in the oven, doesn't she?

Also, you forgot to use the anthro tag

You need a prereader, there are quite a few errors here.

8198313 its the galaxy i have to write these on its a lot harder to edit than a full sceen comp

8198534

A guilded royal pony gaurd's helmet protecting your head.

8198534 All the more reason for you to get some help with this.

Is this a self insert or an Anon in Equestria story? The tags confuse me.

8200059 still kinda getting used to them, a self insert is when it uses terms like you and a first person pov? and annon in eg is when the character has no name and is meant to be the reader?

2nd person tag needed

She is totaly pregnant
Like, totaly
not even need to read the chapter
heh

Tell me when the next chapter?

He's turning into a dragon. Well that kills the story for me.

Hmm interesting chapter

Great work keep it up

there are.... a lot of spelling mistakes in this chapter.

Oh, no! He's turning into Cobra Commander!

Great story But can you please continue it?

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im back...i dont know if i wil though

Alright. Just keep us posted.

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