Fleur De Liss alway dreamed of being a loving mother but after she found she could not have foal her world ended. That is until she found out how to get foals another way.
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Oh this was fun to read, I wonder what the old goat had in mind for him, and what he is plaining to do when he sees his mother would he ask her to have an alibi for his wife about the foal or could it be something darker? I love how you present Fancy in your story. I will be looking forward to see what next you come up with.
8522842Thanks you I will try my best.
Well overall this fic is great. My advice will be to give more context in these foals. Not just their backstories but how do they feel as they regress or how they were before they were hypnotized. Also Cheerilee is spelt like that lol. Also add more to how the foals become her foals the physical changes as well as the mental. Be more descrpitive also as a side note do more then having them just messing their diapers maybe have them drool or start babbling nonsence. Once is fine but doing it over amd over again is boring. Anyways im inpressed so far and this is really good. Ill continue watching to see how this goes.
8617430 Thank you for you your point of view I'm glad that you enjoyed it so far. I will try and implement your suggestions to make my story better.
Got any updates?
8656205 working on them, had to switch some chapters around What do you think about the cover art? Mix-up made it, I hope you will like what is going to come next.
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You I only how Doris justice free button mash.
( and yes love mix-up artwork!)