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Twilight and Dash, upon discovering that the long awaited "Daring Doo 4" movie contains, eugh, Humans, decide to rent out A Nightmare Moon on Elm Street.
Of course all their friends are invited. There is absolutely no way any shenanigans could possibly ensue.
None.
Somehow I get the feeling there won't be very much movie-watching in this fic.
There were some GREAT lines in this, such as: "I’ll show you and Pinkie and Applejack and Fluttershy and even Rarity and Rainbow Dash! Especially Rainbow Dash! Which is me, because I’m just that awesome!" 
My shenanigan radar is coming up blank. No shenanigans here, not for at least 3 miles, nosiree-
Wait, the batteries are dead. Lemme review while I find some more...
It's well-written, and I spotted no mistakes (though, I did sort of skim it gathering the important points rather than fully scrutinise). I can sense nothing is really going to happen, but that's what makes the story good: Rainbow Dash finds out what horror movies are like, and the rest find out how accustomed she is to them. The interesting part is the fact that you could take it in any direction - there's a lot of potential for anything to happen...or, indeed, nothing at all.
Keeping an eye on this.
Lol think i will read.
>>815641 Ooo! How about, "“You finish that word, punk, and I will style your hair. I mean it. I will make you beautiful! There will be curling irons involved. When I am done, I am going to wash that mane of yours, and condition it. It will be silky-soft for weeks. Do I make myself clear?”
Hmm, a description from the frontpage that actually makes me want to read a fic? Hell hath surely frozen over. Will update with opinions.
Because your a pegasus.
Your should be you're.
“Well, I was sort of trying to figure out sextant stuff, well, that’s what Twilight told me it is”
Missing punctuation at the end.
As for story comments the story was great and the jokes were hilarious. The characterizations, while a tittle exaggerated was not beyond reasonable and appropriate for a comedy fic.
I only have 2 comments/questions:
1: Rainbow was Twi's "ride" home from Canterlot? What, was she just going to carry her or did she have a small chariot or wagon?
2: I do not understand why Applejack had "a little gold telescope in her mouth". Can you explain the joke? Because I obviously don't get it.
Also I look forward to more. One of my favorite older comedy fics has them going to a horror movie.
This story has so much potential. It literally reeks of potential. With a beginning chapter like this, you can do anything with this fic.
Somewhere close by, if you listened carefully enough, mournful honking could be heard from somewhere in the general direction of Fluttershy’s cottage.
Fluttershy committed animal cruelty!!
Oh, OK. Sextants are more than just the telescope part though...
Wait a minute...
She turned around to see Pinkie Pie standing over Applejack, who was hyperventilating on the floor, with a little gold telescope in her mouth.
OOOOOHHHHHHH!!!.... I see. It was the sentence structure that was confusing me. The reason it was described as "a little gold telescope" was because the perspective had switched to Rainbow Dash. And it's entirely possible from the wording that the sextant is not in AJ's mouth, but in Pinkie's.
Hey, author. Might want to not make that sentence a separate paragraph so it's better illustrated as RD's perspective, you may also want to change the wording to make it clearer.
Well, that name in the description alone is giving me the thought that Nightmare Moon is next Freddy Krueger, so...you know the drill:
So wait . . . is the fourth Daring-Do movie actually just Whip and Wing?
“You finish that word, punk, and I will style your hair. I mean it. I will make you beautiful! There will be curling irons involved. When I am done, I am going to wash that mane of yours, and condition it. It will be silky-soft for weeks. Do I make myself clear?”
That line sealed the deal for me.
Favetracking like a BAWSS.
A good enough story, with an excellent main idea and some good humour, but it's just not gripping me. It seems to be moving at quite a fair lick, a bit too fast to really focus on it. Slow down, describe more, and write a bit longer and you'll have that featured box for weeks. I'll fave this to see how you develop, and like it because, well, I like it! 
This should be fun. tracked
CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS, CRUSADERS!
I'll send you the bills of my burial, because this here just killed me And it's not even gotten into the movie yet! Tho I am wondering what the hail is Fluttershy doing on a horror movie show. Soemthing tells me it's not gonna be the last time we see pot-plantshy
Except for the Indy 4 bashing (arrgh! more??), this is bucking great! I love it when ponies and movies come together in artwork or in fanfiction. There's a terrific joke in here every two or three paragraphs. Since your strong point is obviously humor, it's a small wonder that Pinkie Pie's moments really had me laughing.
The only thing I find wrong here is that on a slumber party when they really go all-out with decorations, snacks, and comfortable seating, they leave Spike behind yet again. Didn't the synopsis say "all" her friends?
Pinkie, I might need a little help with this one...
Of course! I always have rope stashed around for rope emergencies! Here ya go!
That'd be horribly, horribly bad. Pinkie's watching this movie! What do you think she'll become if she sees herself depicted in such a manner? 
yep, the humor's fine, jump on in. In regards to Spike though... is he really Twi's friend? Or is he just a little brother figure? 
Or is he just her assistant? 
Rock on, mate, rock on. Can't wait to read the next chapter!
Your faithful author friend,
Blizzard Underwood
Rainbow Dash is awesome enough to be Rainbow Dash. That is, in fact, perfect logic.
Applejack has a dirty mind, and Pinkie is oblivious to her own words. I don't know which is worse to be!
Ah, Humans. You've completely screwed up the fanfiction part of a fictional series, a fictional fictional series, and the fanfiction part of a fictional fictional series.
Meanwhile, this is a good thing you've got here, and I look forward to more.
Nope. It wasn't. You were wrong, and that makes me sad. There is no way this story could possi-
*Checks featured list*
Oh, so THAT'S why I just got 615 notifications in 12 hours....
Thank you, unlike my last story editing actually works for me now, huzzah, so I'll sort that out. The problem with writing stuff like that is that you know what you mean in your head so it's sort of hard to understand how others might not.
Well, he IS just a baby dragon after all.
This should be good, lots of genuinely good humour, a good story which could totally be an episode of the show and Twilight is a horror movie enthusiast. There are three things I am oddly hoping for...
1. Twilight watching a movie at the end with Celestia and Luna, in poses identical to the cover art.
2. If not number 1, then Luna and Celestia sitting down to a film.
3. Rainbow Dash having nightmares with a few hilarious solutions for coping.
4. Cutie Mark Crusaders, Crusading i.e, laying siege to Diamond Tiara's home XD.
I've got something scarier than any horror movie...
"Feeling the air currents here for you? Because your a pegasus. It's a safety thing."
Really nice so far, although I honestly don't think it deserves all the crazy, OH GOD MOAR, comments yet. Some of the jokes seem tacked on and don't fit in the narrative that well. They're not bad jokes, but I can see where you might have been thinking, 'Wouldn't it be funny if...', and not really letting the humor come from the situation. Still very solid, will read more, likes and favorites reserved for following chapters.
Also why not rent Daring Do 3? Daring fighting cat supremacists for Celestia's cider mug sounds great, and if Dash hasn't seen a movie before it seems like a much better way to get her interested. It's not like #4 ruins the other 3, maybe mention that everypony except Dash has already seen those or something and not just dropping the issue when the fact that #4 is probably bad is revealed.
“You finish that word, punk, and I will style your hair. I mean it. I will make you beautiful! There will be curling irons involved. When I am done, I am going to wash that mane of yours, and condition it. It will be silky-soft for weeks. Do I make myself clear?”
My god, I haven't laughed that hard sense the first chapter of "Through the Eyes of Another Pony".
But, Officer, you can't blame me for that, I already petitioned for my Comedic License!
Also, my Celestia yes, do I agree with you. I wasn't even sure if this would get accepted, for various reasons. My grammar is awful and I have a very... Unique... Sense of humour...
If anything it's made me terrified to post the second chapter, because I'm petrified no one will like it compared to this one etc. etc, what with the movie ACTUALLY starting (All this attention over an introduction? 
) and more of the actual plot unfolding.
I seem to have set myself up to disappoint over 1,000 people at the moment, it seems. The fact that you're so critical of it, but still enjoy it, really, really assuages my fears.
*Wheezes into a paper bag*
“CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS, CRUSADERS!”
Ohboyherewego.jpg
What's next?
CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS TEMPLARS!!!
CUTIE MARK CRUSADER ASSASSINS!!!
Yeah. Bad idea. ESPECIALLY with the CMC involved.
>>819011 I WAS RIGHT! AND I DIDN'T EVEN READ THE THING!
BTW, this is mah triumphant faec.
Now that I've picked on you, I will say that this story is quite funny. The ending, particularly. Seems little miss AJ over here has an unusual mind-set. Sextant, not sex, you silly pony.
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