While a awesome chapter story wise there is a lot of spelling errors I've noticed I'll list them after I finish speaking though. I would honestly suggest taking your time and re-read your story just to make sure it is what you wanted it to be cause some of these errors to me seem like you didn't look it over before you released it. Not that its a bad chapter per say but that it is a bit flawed that can be easily improved on or fixed.
From what she knew about rage shifts when a unicorn or alicorn enters a rage shift is usually a part of ponies flight or fight response. For Pegasus and Earth ponies it's different.
That to me when I read it twice sounds more of a grammer mistake then a actual misspelling but still I suggest you take a look at that real quick
It took a bunch of cookies that day to satisfier her in the aftermath of all the scorch marks she made with her fire.
Ok now begins the list of misspellings. Satisfy might be the word your looking for.
When she rage shifted at Pinkie for the hydra not being the 'duwzzy,' it only lasted a few seconds.
Ok I have no idea what word you were trying to make there but my biggest guess was fuzzy...I think...kinda hard to tell since this is a supposed word from pinkie pie so I could be wrong on the entire thing
The other could only stare at the pink hair impossible as their friend left to make waffles.
This is another bit of grammer mistakes and misspellings as to me the second bolded part just kinda rolls off the tongue a bit and I just couldn't help but point it out as something to re-look at. Also the first bolded part is suppose to be others
And that's it. Hope you don't take it the wrong way as I really enjoyed the story but I'd love to see it improve as well.
Is there anyway to link the dogma recording from doom 2016? I kinda want to hear that awesome demon voice over when going over the testimonies of the doomslayer.
Also, if the votes are (somehow) still open, I'd prefer it to be something she shifts into when it's needed. Something like a superweapon that'd drain her like nothing else, but clearly identify who and what she is... ;]
Ah, even the Doom Slayer has a soft spot.
THOU SHALT LOVE ALL BUNNY RABBITS (save for Angel bunny the douch) ........... so sayth the first commandment of the blessed DOOM SLAYER
Awesome chapter
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Doom Slayer will teach Angel to be nice
While a awesome chapter story wise there is a lot of spelling errors I've noticed I'll list them after I finish speaking though. I would honestly suggest taking your time and re-read your story just to make sure it is what you wanted it to be cause some of these errors to me seem like you didn't look it over before you released it. Not that its a bad chapter per say but that it is a bit flawed that can be easily improved on or fixed.
That to me when I read it twice sounds more of a grammer mistake then a actual misspelling but still I suggest you take a look at that real quick
Ok now begins the list of misspellings. Satisfy might be the word your looking for.
Ok I have no idea what word you were trying to make there but my biggest guess was fuzzy...I think...kinda hard to tell since this is a supposed word from pinkie pie so I could be wrong on the entire thing
This is another bit of grammer mistakes and misspellings as to me the second bolded part just kinda rolls off the tongue a bit and I just couldn't help but point it out as something to re-look at. Also the first bolded part is suppose to be others
And that's it. Hope you don't take it the wrong way as I really enjoyed the story but I'd love to see it improve as well.
the demons killed daisy that's why he kills them for vengeance
I am intregued by this rage shift thing and want to see tia's reaction and Luna using twi's mane to cook smores.
Is there anyway to link the dogma recording from doom 2016? I kinda want to hear that awesome demon voice over when going over the testimonies of the doomslayer.
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Yeah when he's not ripping you limb from limb.
I prefer it to be temporary.
You don't think that when they finish The Slayer's Testament, would they end up awakening the Doom Slayer himself?
I laughed like a maniac when Pinkie came in humming the Doom theme. I love this man, keep it up!
I actually prefer
Also, if the votes are (somehow) still open, I'd prefer it to be something she shifts into when it's needed. Something like a superweapon that'd drain her like nothing else, but clearly identify who and what she is... ;]