"Gather ye rosebuds while ye may, Old Time is still a-flying, And this same flower that smiles today, Tomorrow will be dying."
Against her will, Doctor Caramel Crisp recruits a rehabilitated mad scientist for their next scientific and technological commission. The mare is crazy, there's no denying that, but she's also said to be an unparalleled genius.
Well, Caramel's heard that one before.
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I already feel bad for Caramel and her lost sense of wonder and fascination.
I actually mean this is in a good way. The first chapter and the main character -- or at least perspective character -- is one that a reader can sympathize with even if not liking them.
Well that was all very interesting. Although it doesn't seem like Mane-iac's story.
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Heh. "Very interesting" is good in my book. I'll take it.
If it helps, I see Mane-iac's role in this story mostly through the Sci-Fi lens. The structure of the story is based around the creation of a new technology and others' reactions to it and its creator, with emphasis on the here-and-now and the flashbacks providing a parallel subplot. That traditionally grants a little leeway vis-a-vis fleshing out the character, or at least I like to think so!
That said, I see where you're coming from. The viewpoint character Caramel gets the most actual development (and frankly the most narrative attention). Even here, though, I think I can make a case for it. Caramel's subplot all pivots around and snaps into focus with Mane-iac's actions in the main plot. That's simply because it's through Mane-iac that the subplot sees both its resonance and its resolution.
I'm glad you got something out of it, in any case! Thanks for the comments.
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I can't exactly speak for 7567747 but I feel like Stone Meadow's behavior here doesn’t quite match up with Mane-iac's in the Power Ponies episode. It seems like a bit of a leap that she starts off obsessing over escapist fiction and creating new universe, only to wind up attempting world conquest with hair-themed weapons.
But I can see an in-story reason for the disconnect, I think: here, she's somewhat constrained by pony society, and playing by its rules just long enough to make her sandbox. While Power Ponies is her, having already gotten what she really wanted, just playing her own chosen role and cutting loose inside that sandbox.
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That's fair enough. In hindsight, I should probably have made the connection between Stone Meadow and Mane-iac a bit clearer, or at least less out of the blue. Perhaps some kind of hair products motif that appears once a chapter?
At least your second paragraph captures what I was going for nicely; after all, once you've made your own interconnected universes, why wouldn't you want to be an eccentric villain in one of them? After all, lots of people cut loose online in the real world, and Stone Meadow also has magic to control the pony equivalent of the Internet.
this was so good…. honestly kind of reassuring to read something that understands how creatively breaking rules for greater causes (like societal upheaval) is a skill in and of itself. thank you